| "She" Reviews/Comments [ 55 ] |
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Reviewed By: kokonutsu [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2003 19:32 CDT
Comment/Review:
Well its me again, and sorry for being so harsh before. Let me say the good things about this chapter. You changed the format, there's some originality here with the school being built over the battleground. Naraku is a bitter horny bastard just like he was in the anime. So, nice work i suppose. |
Reviewed By: Me.. On: June 21, 2003 12:15 CDT
Comment/Review:
*Blink *Blink............hmm.........so far i didn't see any spelling errors......if there is must be a typo or something..........by the way the only thing i didn't like is the way you format it. it's better if you make separate paragraphs....it will be easier to read and much formal........hmm......i wonder............i'm a sess/kag fan you know...........so.........*hint *hint..........hehe |
Reviewed By: kokonutsu [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2003 04:18 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Comment/Review:
You spelled Sesshomaru's name wrong, how could you. And more with the one paragraph thing, i wouldn't really want this to be too long, but can't you please, please, please put this into paragraphs. And try not to make Sesshoamru and Kagome fall in love too fast ok? IT's usually pretty stupid when they like each other for no apparent reason. Doesn't Sesshomaru find human's disgusting??? Did you make that Mitz whatever demoness blonde on purpose? Don't tell me your steryotyping! oO0 Ok, i was over reacting that time. Don't really like the OC characters but i'm here to review right? But don't give up hope you can still improve your writint, don't forget to spell check in put in details and character development. A lot of ppl ususally just rush into the romance when they should slow down and put some plot into their stories. Well tata for now, and good luck? |
Reviewed By: kokonutsu [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2003 04:03 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Spelling, spelling and the whole thing made my eye sore. You just rushed through the whole thing man. But seeing that this is the second chapter, maybe it could be better? |
Reviewed By: Precious On: June 20, 2003 23:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked the fact that you made Kagome so sly. This is not realy seen or mentioned in other fan fics. Be awaiting your next cahpter.
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Reviewed By: MoonBunny14 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2003 15:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I guess Im the first one to review your story ( i think on m.m. that is) anyways this is a great plot! your chapters should be longer though, I know how it is, im starting a new ffic too! but i cant seem to make the chapters long enough -_-', anyways UPDATE SOON!! this is great!!
IS THIS A SESS/KAG FIC??? PLEASE LET IT BE!!! IT WOULD BE EVEN BETTER!! update soon!! i hate cliffhangers!!!argh!! ^_^! |
Reviewed By: Angelickiller On: July 17, 2003 21:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I rated the fanfic high for I found it very enjoyable. I love Sessie/Kag Fanfics. I think their probably the best. I think you should keep right Sessie(FUFFY!)/Kag fanfics. Yes for all you Inu and Kag fans Inus wonderfull to, but Sessis is so much cool. I think you should right an other or write a story following this one. OH PLEASE!! It would be wonderfull. You such a lively writer. |
Reviewed By: yukiko On: June 30, 2003 17:41 CDT
Comment/Review:
Awesome! Please write a sequel! PLEASE!!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: KareiSama [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2003 09:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think this was a very fluffy fic even thou it contain a lemon but every good fic contains anyways.
I can't believe you made Naraku so evil,with the and fuc*ing the schoolgirls ='(
( I Like Naraku) |
Reviewed By: #$^(@^!!! On: June 30, 2003 17:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wallo. Just wondering--
THIS IS THE END!?!?!?
THATS IT IF YOU DONT WRITE A SEQUEL TO THIS FICTION I'LL CHOP OFF YOUR ARMS AND STRANGLE YOU WITH THEM!!! FIRE WILL BE INCLUDED...
somewhere...
MOREMOREMOREMOREMORE!!! onegai?? |
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