| "A Fragile Love" Reviews/Comments [ 50 ] |
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Title: Where's the next one?
Reviewed By: OJ Keith On: February 28, 2004 20:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
When's the next chapter coming up? I'm getting really impatient with the next chapter. Nice lemon between Mitsune and Keitaro by the way, make the next one even better!
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Title: What's next?
Reviewed By: Sky Runner On: February 18, 2004 20:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice fight scenes and the sound effects are cool! But I'm dying to read what Mokoto and Keitaro are going to do since she's already made her move on him! I LOVED the lemon you've made with Mitsune and Keitaro, and I'm hoping to read another good one between the mature Keitaro and Mokoto! See ya!
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Title: Nicely done!
Reviewed By: Black Jax On: February 16, 2004 19:37 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good work, on this battle scene with Keitaro and Mokoto! What's happening next is what's got me interested, by the way...Keitaor's become a real good swordwielder, almost like a certain violet-eyed red-haired swordsman I know. Never mind, I wish you good luck on the next episode, and make it really cool! I'm dying with anticipation here. See ya!
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Reviewed By: Kitsune_Bi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 15, 2004 17:39 CST
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WHAT THE HECK IS KEITARO'S PROBLEM!! He's leading them all on! What is he going to do, become a Mormon? sheesh! *Please don't take this as a flame, it's just that I don't like the fact that he's playing with their heads.*
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Title: When's the next chapter?
Reviewed By: RazorFang On: February 14, 2004 21:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is really awesome! Please finish the other episodes!!! I'm dying with antiicpation here!
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Reviewed By: compman44 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2004 01:49 CST
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So far, I've really liked your story. Your English is somewhat hard to follow, but it's understandable, and you did warn us that you're not a native speaker. ^_~ On the whole, it's an intriguing take on the LH series, and I'd love to read more of it. One last comment, regarding your "Author's note" in episode 6; you say that Naru is Keitaro's "promised girl" in the anime, and that it's Mutsumi in the manga. I don't know about the anime, since I haven't had a chance to watch past episode 5 ;_; but I know in the manga, it's Naru. o_O
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Reviewed By: Kitsune_Bi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2004 20:36 CST
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Oh dear poor Motoko-chan! PLEASE make the pairings Keitaro/Naru! I mean they get MARRIED in the manga for pete's sake! That has to have some sort of credit! Ooohhh I LOVE duels! Can't wait for the next chapter! ^-^
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Reviewed By: Kitsune_Bi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2004 12:55 CST
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MAKE IT NARU MAKE IT NARU MAKE IT NARU!!!!
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Title: Nice work
Reviewed By: Salvador R, Ballez On: January 12, 2004 02:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to admit that this fic is cool, and it's got gereat originality. But i think you might want to change the name of Mitsune, you see, I have a magazine on anime that say's that Mitsune's real name is Kitsune, or japanese for Fox. By the way, the lemon scene you've made for Keitaro and Kitsune was very good, nicely done and right to the point. I've got no doubts in my mind that the other scense will be really intersting. Though how Keitaro will handle those scense with the girls should be really interesting to read about. Many thanks to you Lonely_Avenger...and keep on writing
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Reviewed By: S.M. On: December 19, 2003 23:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
can't wait to read more,please update as soon as possible
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Title: Chapter 8
Reviewed By: Shadow Megatron [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2003 12:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed this,immenselly, keep going, is this going to be a Mitsune& makoto& okinowan chick get Keitaro fanfiction? Well if not i stillam summarilly impressed with the subtle byplay of emotios Congratulations!
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Reviewed By: boss_frog On: November 25, 2003 14:04 CST
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i dont see why everyone is in love with this fic your spelling, grammer, and sentance structure suck. i find it almost imposible to read this thing.
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Reviewed By: Grand_Crusader [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2003 14:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The writing of the fanfic, the style, spelling, originality, and such are great. However, you came to an incorrect conclusion. As of the last manga (Which was 14, BTW), Keitaro married...NARUSEGAWA NARU! Just like the anime. Other than that, you've got great work here, keep it up!
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Reviewed By: Zauriel [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2003 15:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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Keitaro/Mitsune pairing was not a bad idea. I really like the way you describe their sex scene. It was damn erotic.
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Reviewed By: S.M. On: August 21, 2003 21:34 CDT
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can't wait for more ,please update as soon as possible |
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