| "Love and war" Reviews/Comments [ 83 ] |
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Title: OMG LOVED IT!
Reviewed By: EdwardKagome [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2005 17:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG I LOVED YOUR STORY! IT SO KICKED ASS! WOW! I wish I could write like that! BUt my stories all suck! Wow, but how could you end it like that, there better be a sequal! I wanna know what happens, does Kag come back, whats up with Inu that poor baby! Well write a sequal! Loved it one of my favs!
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Title: Great story
Reviewed By: Valerie22 On: November 21, 2004 01:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, to start of with you are a very good writer. I don't mean to be critical for you should now that I rarely leave reviews but I liked your originality very much so. You should know that your style of writing indeed needs some work, the spelling and grammar errors are rare but they're there, the origianility of your story is admirable, and I very well enjoyed reading this! Now, the style of grammar is something that you should not worry about, you only need to read a few pages of any grammar book and you'll get. As for the spelling and grammar you really have no trouble just remember to reread what you have written carefully to check from these simple but noticeable mistakes. Everything else was very good! I'm very impressed with how you kept everything going so well...I mean, you put angst(sadness, and anger) and most importantly ROMANCE. You did have some mistakes: keeping tracks of some things and confusing and contradicting others but as I explained earlier if you just reread what you have written this won't be a problem anymore. I'm quite ashamed to say that as old as I am I still enjoy this show very much. I love Kag+Inu=couple and wouldn't have it any other way, so yes I was upset with the fact that Kag wasn't Inu's first woman to BE WITH, her first child was killed and Inuyasha's harsh opinion of them having one, and lastly(I cried my eyes out, used a whole kleenex box, & had red eyes and nose)Kag's death and Inu's loneliness without love. SEQUEAL!!! This was * |
Title: OH JEEZ
Reviewed By: Crazy_Green [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2004 00:31 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH JEEZ that was GREAT. 8 thumbs up (if only i had 6 more!) i can't wait for the sequel great job!
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Reviewed By: jin_the_wind_master_420 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2004 14:53 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Such a sad ending to an excellent story. You even had me getting a little teary eyed in the last chapters. PLEASE get the sequal up as soon as possable. I cant wait to read it.
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Reviewed By: lemon_lover [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2004 07:12 CDT
Comment/Review:
i cried like a little bitch
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Reviewed By: LumChan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2004 00:42 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
amazing.
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Title: Just a bit more to say
Reviewed By: RedHerring [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2004 21:42 CDT
Comment/Review:
I noticed also that you breaked for a new paragraph when you didn't need to in alot of places. All I can say is try to make your paragraphs at least five sentenses long. English class teaches you those things for a reason. /////////// Keep up the good work on the story. I think that you have alot of potential as a writer.
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Title: For up to ch.13
Reviewed By: RedHerring [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2004 21:40 CDT
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Hey, If Inuyasha and Sango share the same parents, wouldn't that make her a hanyou also? The story is pretty good. However, you do forget some things that you wrote, and you end up contradicting yourself. For example: In chapter four, after the flashback, you say that the kiss Kagome received was her first. However, you clearly state that Kagome was kissed in chapter one. "This time she definitely felt his lips on hers." You do this several times throughout the story--saying one thing and then contradicting that later on. Also, the character Ling did quite a dramatic flip-flop in character. You didn't mention any bitterness before hand, and all of a sudden she and Kagome are on bad terms. You might want to smooth that out. /////////// Naraku seems a little OOC due to the fact that he's complimenting Jaken.////// Oh, another thing. You stated earlier that Inuyasha and Kikyo were on bad terms due to her slandering of his heratige. Then you put them in a heart-to-heart conversation. If any reconciliation happened, you might want to mention it before hand. ///////// Otherwise this story is decently written. Just catch those contradictions, and getting a beta-reader can help wonders. You don't often catch mistakes like those. Especially if it's been a while since you've written the story. Also, you are more likely to miss spelling and grammar mistakes when you proof-read the chapter yourself. You did have some grammar mistakes. Mostly passive voice, some commas were missinng.
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Reviewed By: Higurashi Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2004 02:59 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
o god you had me in tears till i read your author message that said you were writing a squeal i haven't cried since i was like five and i'm threeteen now but your story moved me and touched-ed-ed my heart...I will be reading the squeal you can count on that and even though i know you brought Kagome back i sit here right now bawling my eyes out for the first time in along time like i metoined-ed-ed before......this story is so good and your such a great writer i have to say hands down you are the best writier if you can put me in a fit of tears...expect to see my name for the reveiws of the squeal...but be warned-ed-ed you have made me express a weak feeling and i shall be sending my flesh eating hamsters and my zombie geribels(sp?)that get droped-ed-ed off by the flying purple poop monkeys..lol don't ever stop writing your to good to stop love this stoy(i know you know it's the 100th time this review)and will share it with what little friends i have that like anime...love me^_~well you don't have to but..alittle of topic and i'm almost out of words so send me a message and talk sometime^_^
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Reviewed By: angelbabe17 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2004 20:24 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HOORAY!!!! ill read n e thing by u...ur very good
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Title: 18
Reviewed By: angelbabe17 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2004 20:19 CDT
Comment/Review:
awwwww no kagome died =( so sad
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Reviewed By: damngarfieldz On: August 16, 2004 23:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
great work! i love it. looking forward to see the ending. =]
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Reviewed By: DracoGinnyHarry [MediaMiner Member] On: July 26, 2004 00:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
good story
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Reviewed By: Inukame [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2004 11:26 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
I like this story, I hope you update soon. I want to read more of this and know what is happening next.
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Reviewed By: Chicatude On: July 06, 2004 20:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your style of writing was absolutely fantastic but could be improved. Your spelling and grammer was good but I found many kinks. Your Originality and Creativity was outstanding though similar to some others I have read. You gave me much enjoyment and I was very pleased though slightly depressed. Now I don't want to nit pick but truely I must say you definitly need to put more details. I think the story had true potential and you do too as a writer. I don't normally write reviews unless I feel the storyline and or plot has LOTS and I put emphasis on LOTS of potential. I am a hard Reviewer because I am a professional writer and am merely 15 years old. I feel if your gonna write then you better write with a firely passion that burns brighter than hell's most innercore. You have a great deal of that and as some one once told me if you love to do something do it to your fullest extent. I myself have read over 2,000 pages and many different fanfics during my summer for sheer fun and I myself write though not on fanfiction's but my very own books and poems. I am trying to say though I am putting lots of extra info is that you could be a well known writer if that's what you want and you should go for it. But you need to concentrate on your weak points such as typo's and misspelled words and detail. Now I have one piece of advice I don't share often but because you can be a great one here goes. Your stories need to take life in you heart and the heart of your readers. Good Luck Kate!! |
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