| "Urbania" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Reviewed By: queenserena(NO! THE END!) On: December 03, 2004 23:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Rin:*sniff*/It's the end...NOOOOOO!!!!!!!/Rin:....Hey! Now Jesse-chan can read it cause it's finished!/Yeah! We go bug....MHAHAHAHA!
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Reviewed By: queenserena(It's me!) On: October 29, 2004 18:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*claps*YEAH!!!!!!/Rin:Rin wants to throw a party then!/Okay, I'll get food!*disappears and reappears*Sorry, can't./Rin:Huh?/Remember, my mom locked us out?/Rin:Oh yeah....Oh well!/*sets off party popper*PERFECT JOB!Now Paige can read this, she gets mad when they're not finished and I recommend them.../Rin:Hai...*sets off another*Rin wants a sequel!/*hits her on head*You have to wait, baka bimbo!/Rin:Baka!*hits back*/Hey! BAKA!/Both:*fight*/Lily:What are you two doing?/Both:*jump*AAHHHH!/Lily:I punish you two, and you're out here reading stories and fighting, waisting people's vaulable time! I'm ashamed of you two!/Both:*bows*Gomen.../Lily:*points*Now apologize to everyone who's time you wasted!/Both:*bows again* Gomen.../Lily:*nods* Good, I'm sorry they wasted your time, we'll leave now.*bows*/Rin:Rin didn't mean to.../Lily:*reasuringly*I know dear, Rebekuka always does this.../...*sarcasicly*Thanks mom.../Lily:*eyes flare*What was that?/*shivers*Nothing.../Lily:We'll leave now, good luck on your writings!/Rin:Bye, bye.../*sigh* Wish me luck, and we'll wait for a sequel....
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Reviewed By: queenserena(It's me!) On: October 15, 2004 18:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
....No!/Rin:No, no, no!
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Reviewed By: queenserena12345 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2004 16:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*frowns*Why is such a great story abandonded?/Rin:Rin doesn't know...
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Title: hmm
Reviewed By: Ranchan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2003 05:40 CST
Comment/Review:
ok i havent finished reading all chapters yet, and I dont know if I can. This fic is just to sad. I hope you turn it abit less dark in future chapters.
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Reviewed By: silverkitty On: November 09, 2003 14:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
your story is so emotional. i hope i'll hear the ending soon.
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Reviewed By: Angelwater8 On: July 13, 2003 17:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, talk about heart wrenching! Your story is written very well; it's one of the better written stories out there! *^_~* There's a lot I want to say about your story, but it's kinda hard to put into words. Your story is...depressing and empowering at the same time. Well, the time Serena lives in is depressing. How Serena DEALS with these tough times is empowering. Honestly, I didn't think this story would play out well because of how the men are tyrants over the women etc. I didn't like how the women were treated and that's probably the main reason why I wasn't too thrilled about reading it. (The beatings and abuse are evil! T_T) But suprisingly, I became intrigued by your story. I would like to know how Serena and the women of this cruel time frame will overcome obsticles and challenges set against them. I look forward to your new chapter, and I hope you'll be a little nicer to your female chracters *^_^* Well keep up the good work! |
