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| "Transformations" Reviews/Comments [ 409 ] | | Pages (28): [ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 › » ] | Title: 26
Reviewed By: grimmichi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2013 12:51 EST
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awww why can't they poor kit/pup just go with her? | Title: ch23
Reviewed By: grimmichi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2013 12:17 EST
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haha I love his idea of a race! but would kagome's maternal instinct be kicking into over drive by now? | Title: wow
Reviewed By: grimmich On: February 11, 2013 09:54 EST
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youare sooo cruel to poor Inu! Why is she being such a bitch to him over something that wasn't even entirely HIS fault!? She had a hand in it too... | Reviewed By: Lunabell [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2009 02:55 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So this story is complete? Great story by the way
| Title: Can't take it anymore!
Reviewed By: King Baka [MediaMiner Member] On: October 03, 2008 00:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
I first stumbled upon this story a few years ago, but I didn't have the patience to make it more than a few chapters before I got disenchanted. This time I made it to about chapter 30 before I decided 'I can't take it anymore!' I only made it that far because I'm planning my own 'Kagome turns into a hanyou' story, and I wanted to make sure I didn't steal any of your idea. This isn't a flame; it's a well thought out critique, a real review. First the positives. Your style of writing, sentence structure, diction, etc. is very good. Very few spelling/grammatical errors. That first lemon is pretty good, too. I have many problems with the fic, mostly revolving around plot & character issues. Everything I've read so far seems rushed, like you were running behind a deadline or something. Take the time to draw out storylines, giving detail and in-depth feelings and emotions along the way. And you can't just have everybody magically show up within the span of a few minutes (first few chapters). Perhaps you might have explained these insane coincidences later in the story, but it just felt like you weren't making any effort to justify the stuff you were feeding us. You did bring out an overarching plotline, with Kagome's father and his pack, but it just felt like you were jumping from adventure to adventure nonstop, like you were writing tricked out on expresso. Another major problem I have is that the characters are so incredibly out of character. In short, it's too easy. It's too easy for Kagome, Inuyasha, and the others to accept her transformation. Yes, Kagome is an open-minded person, and she loves Inuyasha as a hanyou, but this isn't like changing your hairdo! It's a drastic, life-altering change, and Kagome and the others should have a more difficult time adjusting to it. Shippo's reaction irked me most of all; why is he so damn happy? He liked Kagome just fine as a human, so why should he like her better as a hanyou? The Inuyasha/Kagome fight scenes are ridiculous for one main reason: neither would even think about hurting the other...EVER! Not if they were in their right minds, and even in his demon form Inuyasha recognizes and protects her. And if you're going to have Inuyasha try to rape Kagome, and she actually believes it's an attempted rape, you can't have her forget about it and screw him a couple weeks later. You can't have it both ways; if she really thinks of it as attempted rape, would she be able to move on and trust him again so quickly? Your other option (splendently done in SplendentGoddess' "Red Eyes, Warm Heart") is to have Kagome not think of the attempt as rape at all, just consentual sex. Well, I'm almost done griping. I respect how many hits you've gotten for this story, but I honestly don't know how you've gotten so many good reviews. My readers tell me I have a very unique writing style, and yours is completely different. Maybe that's why I didn't like your story, or maybe it's because I didn't finish it. Either way, feel free to delete this review if you think I'm just spewing crap here, especially if this is the first negative review you've gotten. And I repeat: this isn't a flame. I like to review when I feel strongly about a story, and I would be remiss if I didn't tell you my true feelings about this one.
| Title: so...
Reviewed By: goofy_goober [MediaMiner Member] On: March 18, 2008 04:14 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i finally finished reading it... yay... but i have no idea where to find the alternate ending.... can someone please help..... But off of that this story was fantastic... it did remind me of the lucky ones a bit but you did make it different... great job... keep up the good work!!!!
| Reviewed By: im_inuyashas_dirty_little_secret [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2008 16:28 EST
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i always went by this story and i thought i read it but when i disced (Sp?) to re-read it you proved me wrong ! i really loved it omfg dont stop writing! ^-^ lol
| Title: Don't remember if I ever reviewed...
Reviewed By: iloveanimecartoons [MediaMiner Member] On: November 02, 2007 13:52 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
...but you've got 401 reviews and, after scanning page 5 I was through trying to find out. lol! This story was so cool! It moved at just the right speed for it to be believable for all the characters involved. The gore was so vivid and believable and I almost cried along with Kags at the Final Fight chapters. Two words: Inu's tongue. Two more words: Kagome's blood. And the happenings thereafter...WHOA! This was so cool, seeing Sesshy at Kagome's aid and Kagome having some balls--yessss! I LOURVE Rare and LOL when you named the mother Ray! I'm glad Kags had a daddy. His relationship with her was so cool! Nice to see Mama getting a little play, too! She's too happy to be alone, IMHO. There are WAY too many comments in my arsenal to fit this section, believe me! Just know that i LOURVED it! AND your fanart (which I'm also reviewing at the moment) is AWE to the SOME! You RAWK, DL!
| Reviewed By: Dashuu, The Water Demon On: September 15, 2007 18:42 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AWESOME STORY! i almost died laughing at Sesshomarus bet on Kagome.... oh well, this is the only story ive ever read that made me tear up *sniffle*
| Title: :)
Reviewed By: LovedIt!! On: September 11, 2007 22:04 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it! I read your sequel to this before hand,but I like this one even better!And yay 400+ comments :) Waiting anxiously for more!
| Title: Awsomeness
Reviewed By: Kazuki Ferret [MediaMiner Member] On: July 26, 2007 21:36 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The best fanfic this ferret has ever read! I really liked reading every part of it and am considering reading it again! I really loved your little extra things you put on there to get people to reveiw, they were really funny. You should try your hand at becoming an author, I'd buy your novels!
| Title: Just finished reading...
Reviewed By: estecca [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2007 18:49 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
To be honest, I was unhappy with a lot of the choices made in this fic, but hey, I kept on reading, didn't I? As a whole, it's really something to be proud of. However, one thing this fic really lacked was a lot of the background knowledge. Writing a believable fantasy story (especially one set in a foreign country) is impossible without doing research and including details that set the scene. I was very unimpressed with the way you simple put an author's note in where you could have simply looked up a type of Japanese cuisine; there were quite a few other instances as well. It seems unimportant, but things like that are very important, and easier than you think to include. And, you learn about foreign cultures when you do it. These instances and the vast multiple births in Kagome and Inuyasha's large "family" make the story unbelievable, and the author less knowledgable. There were very few single births, and with the ratio of conceiving twins at 1 out of 80, that of triplets being 1 out of 6,400, and so on, it's too unreal. Setuplets? The first instance of all setuplets in a birth surviving was in 1997. Even if they aren't human, it took a way a sense of reality for me. Despite all of this, the writing style is engaging, and your spelling and grammar did not interfere with reading the story. It's a beautiful story, despite it's heavily drawing upon the story lines and ideas of other fanfictions. Lovely work.
| Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2007 22:56 EDT
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amazing story... i really liked it... great work... good job!
| Title: Chapter 60
Reviewed By: meatshield3 On: July 04, 2007 01:29 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*gasp* the lemons in this fic where descriptive enough that i felt i was right next to them during the whole damn thing. This is easily the best fic i have ever read, the best lemons i've ever read, best everything i've ever read. In fact im going to use 160 pages of printer paper just to print it out to read on the 8 hour flight England. Best wishes, meatshield
| Title: Definatly one of my top favorites!
Reviewed By: tohruxkyoxyukilover [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2007 22:51 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was so great this was totally one of my most enjoyed reading fanfictions ever! great job! i can't believe u havnt published this as a book yet this would get so many readers!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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