| "The Princess of Avalon And The Prince Of Egypt" Reviews/Comments [ 21 ] |
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Reviewed By: no one in peticular On: May 20, 2004 14:58 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i have really enjoyed it so far. please continue. and please make sakura be with yami because bakura is mine! bwahahaha! ok... i'm ok now.... lol ^^
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Reviewed By: DeathsAngel [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2003 21:26 CST
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I think I'm going to agree with the others more detail would be something to work on and making it clearer on who is talking. Please write more though cause I am wondering what's going to happen to Sakura and Yami, and Bakura for that matter.
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Reviewed By: mistress_of_ra [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2003 18:30 CST
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It's nice but add more detail! I should know being an authoress myself! The only part I don't like is the Bakura and Sakura kissing scene. I like Sakura and Yami. But hey, if she wants Bakura I get Yami to myself!
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Reviewed By: fire_blade On: October 26, 2003 22:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a good story and i hope you can updat this but ne thing you could work on is the arguements in this story for there sort of make you lose interiest in the story for a little because they are a bit boring other then this is a good story
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Reviewed By: Medatsu [MediaMiner Member] On: October 23, 2003 16:44 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh ya.....now ur getting better but MORE DETAIL!!! Senery and more emotions! U wanna be a good writter dont ya?! ....Oh and make longer chapters...It would be better.
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Reviewed By: Medatsu [MediaMiner Member] On: October 23, 2003 16:38 CDT
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Ok have you ever heard of detail?! And What about "Bla" things to show someone is talking! In recap senery+ character+ emotion details and clear identification of conversaitions...got that?
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