| "Two Halves" Reviews/Comments [ 38 ] |
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Title: Zefyr
Reviewed By: Zefyr [MediaMiner Member] On: September 20, 2003 12:26 CDT
Comment/Review:
Note: there are ways to write a simple paragraph or two at the beginning of the chapter, rather than having to do an author's note. Usually it's as simple as: ------
"Five years passed, and Duo found himself the final contestant, with Rao his only competition..." etc ------
Other than that, I have few critiques. I applaud your excellent descriptions of the nasty critters, and the battlescene. You also had some very nice turns of phrase regarding the political developments as a result of the nasty critters moving into the various countries; the statement about Lin stepping into the political and martial breach was particularly apt. It's an important detail, too, because otherwise, it'd be like: oh, so they're black magic from some two-bit country, so? But you've demonstrated that Sanc's white magic can't do the trick, which makes Duo (and Rao) more potent as enemies. ------
And Heero shows up again! Heh. What happens next...? |
Reviewed By: black beauty On: September 18, 2003 00:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am trully loving this fic. Wow! The turning of events and Dou reaching for the top. I love it. I really love this fic so please update this fic soon. |
Reviewed By: GoldenRat [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2003 21:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
This is a great fic. The characters are really well written and the story is developing so well. |
Reviewed By: Turtlefire On: September 14, 2003 14:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow!!!! This fic is just magnificent! It is so original! The story keeps on getting better and better. I got so excited reading it, please update soon!! I could not thank you enough!!!!! |
Reviewed By: GoldenRat [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2003 16:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Trowa was kinda hostile towards Heero. What's Quatre doing at Kespar? |
Title: Yamaneko
Reviewed By: Yamaneko [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2003 07:43 CDT
Comment/Review:
I'm awaiting for all your GWfic so please update soon. I love your work. |
Reviewed By: GoldenRat [MediaMiner Member] On: September 10, 2003 13:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
I'm impressed by the way Heero's survival was explained. yeah, Wufei and Duo are now allies. this is going to be interesting... |
Reviewed By: kt On: September 02, 2003 06:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
A refreshing change from the usual genre. Well written and not too much in the way of spelling mistakes etc. Enjoyable. A good read and so different from the usual setting. It shows the heart of the king and his advisors placed in a very bad situation. |
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