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| "Lonesome Cowboy Blues (Sniper Slut of Galbadia Story)" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] | Title: wow indeed
Reviewed By: wind and vinegar On: June 30, 2005 07:58 CDT
Comment/Review:
i'm using this as a bb instead of a review. damien_black, was that you who posted the anonymous review that was oh-so-ever-helpful in Oct 2003? or are you omarello, who obviously has no grasp of what yaoi is, who it is for and what it hopes to achieve which has NOTHING to do with the 'gay community'. i guess the question i have is why are you reading something you obviously disliked again??!?!? that is completely fucked up on your part. you clearly have nothing better to do than to re-read fics you hate so much. that is really sad. to the author. I thought it was fabulous and I liked the dialogue as well.
| Title: lame
Reviewed By: damien_black On: June 29, 2005 23:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
dude i seen this before and my rating will be the same as it was last time, this fanfic is very BORING, and crappy at the same time.
| Reviewed By: keishi [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2004 10:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Très beau. I'm not sure what other reviewers were thinking when they read this, all I can tell you is what I thought. This is pure pleasure for pleasure's sake, and its wonderful. It's sexy as all hell, and quite unapologetic about it. I think the emotion injected into it is just the right amount, not under nor over the top. Quite a good read. I can't believe I'd never read this before!
| Reviewed By: Talyssa [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2003 19:59 CST
Comment/Review:
Er I've probably read this but I don't really remember which it was, I just linked here from your livejournal. ^^;; So I can't honestly defend it without taking the time to re-read it (which I don't have). But I do think I should point out something inherently and generally amiss in the nasty review. He referred to a "sad desire to fulfill a sexual fantasy" but as far as I'm concerned, there's nothing sad about sexual fantasys, OR desires to fill them. And i'm willing to bet you feel the same way. I think saying something like that reflects a world view that you shouldn't pay attention to if you aren't of a mind to. Oh, and as for your male characters being written in a non-male way (or whatever he was implying there) I can firmly attest that there are a LARGE number of men in my acquaintence who FAR outstrip even me (and i'm hardly a masculine type girl) in terms of femininty. Straight men for that matter. I supposed it'd be nice to be able to say "men act like this and women act like this" (all right, so I *do* say it ...but you know what i mean) but that doesn't mean that that reflects reality. Just because SOME people like don't like exceptions. In case you're wondering this isn't in your livejournal comments because I always feel like I'm intruding a bit when I write comments on someone else livejournal and they aren't someone I actually know.... ^^ So I probably repeated what all those other nice people said, but its always good to hear again I guess.
| Title: wha?
Reviewed By: robthetail On: October 29, 2003 13:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, I'm a gay man and I like it. The characters seem convincing to me. Maybe your other reviewer isn't going to the right bars?
| Title: Well...
Reviewed By: omarello On: October 29, 2003 12:45 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an amazingly trite story. I've felt that fanfiction writing was the final resource of the truly uninspired. Now I have additional conviction. I didnt finish all of it, but I will comment on what I did read. The characterization is poor. None of your characters come alive, they dont have personalities, their reactions to events in the world being truly bizarre. For instance, squall is apparently a mantle piece. He exists solely for the author to indulge in sexual fantasy. A social nitwit like squall is unlikely to feel comfortable in social situations. Yet squall is perfectly willing to follow blindly after rinoe into social situations of extraordinary touchiness. For that matter, the actions of our lost lover, are... not believable. Of course, in this story, where the only reason for writing is a sad desire to fulfill sexual fantasy, it apparently isnt important that the actions of the characters be meaningful within the context of their background. In addition, you, clearly, have very little idea how to convincingly write the part of a man. Im sorry to tell you this, but the internal workings of your characters seem to be inspired by bad fiction, apparently bad fiction written about women. Your characters remind me of a convincing life sized card board cut out my younger sister once had. It only takes a glance to expose the lack of substance. The entire premise of the story is poor. This is badly played out highschool humor. (Im not sure what your target audience is.) It seems that you are still uncomfortable with the whole notion of human sexuality, in particular with the sexuality of our gay community. I should hope you would stop producing poor depictions of a community you know absolutely nothing about. Best of luck
| Title: lonesome cowboy blues
Reviewed By: gwendolyn_flight On: October 28, 2003 14:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is a great look at how the character might react to the given situation. plus, the writing is fantastic, the dialogue interesting, and squall adorably attempting concern. keep writing!
| Reviewed By: ...... On: October 27, 2003 19:57 CST
Comment/Review:
wow. that sucked and was really ooc
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