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Title: Hopefully a true review.
Reviewed By: Louise Paula On: January 11, 2005 15:49 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
I sincerely hope you don't take this review as a flame- for that purpose I'm including my email address Duo.Heero@gmail.com. I started reading this fic way back when you first started writing it, and as someone who has worked in neonatal and obstetric nursing for nearly ten years I was interested despite myself. You started out with an interesting idea- even if reality had to be suspended from the beginning due to the inability of hermaphrodites to become pregnant. I honestly thought that this one would be an mpreg I could enjoy... you researched a lot and really seemed to know the ins and outs of pregnancy *which is always a good thing*. However, I've been seeing some changes in your characterizeration for a while now and to be truthful, I really don't see any of the gundam pilots in the people who are now in your fic. You write well and have a lot of information behind you, but you don't need to utilize it all. A lot of your chapters lately have an unnecessary feel to them. I see a lot of Duo in this story but not much Heero- one case being the mission he was sent on. Was there a purpose behind that which will become apparent later? It felt as if he was just going away for a while and then he was back, and there was no real purpose to it. I really hope you don't take this as a flame. You get so many wonderful reviews that you can disregard this one out of hand if you wish and it won't really matter to you. There's been a lot of hard work in this fic. I respect that.
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Reviewed By: AnimeDuneJediElf [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2005 15:14 EST
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LOL! The insructions were in the baby seat! LOL!
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Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2005 14:54 EST
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...is nothing to scoff at. But i at times i see where his need to get it embedded in Yuy's head that he's male and not some fragile being... but at same time he should be able to sympathize that females go through that kind of treatment all the time. Besides he should be going to one of those breathing classes... nah the nurse'll probably tell him about that, it helps with the contracts to get his body to relax right? Oh and the idea of Duo breast feeding his baby, i think prehaps it is a good ideal to get him a breat pump *snickers* if he should lactate before the baby's born, like he said as an after thought to Tro and Quat's teasing that would be what the baby would need. If he can get the pump and save it for the baby later if he dries up before the baby's born. And ya i think heero is having sympathy pains, i mean he let go of all his prefect soldier pretense at the sight of his lover and bawled right along with him with kisses and clinging embraces. ok gotta go and i'll read the chapters soon! Happy new year! *glomps Shen then waves*
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Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2005 14:43 EST
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Oi!!!! I've been gone far to looong... Did ya miss me!? Well i'm up to chapter 81 Wahoo!! I'll try to be a more active reviewer. Gosh i dunno where to begin with comments...OH! lol that whole honeycomb being stuck in a uhh very compromising place was hilarious!! *eyes glittering with mirth* Then the babysit from HELL!! lol oh gosh, i only hope that when kids come with or without that significant other for me i'll make sure the instuctions are stampled some place visible and unmovable. *snickers* Go Miracle and what a name for a pup! I thought that prehaps the pup was see Duo not only as master but surrogate mom, because prehaps the baby pup is aware of the baby human *shrugs* that's a long shot. But often animals are aware of other pregnant animals... anyway getting back on topic, Duo could always dress in maternal clothes and let his hair down a bit, pitch his voice up higher if he has to speak and assume the disguise as a pregnant woman if he soo upset about being a homebound. Heck if i was a guy in his position, dressing as a woman would be a security measure not an insult. Being called a woman is a very sensitive issue for Duo and challenges his masculinity and men seem to hate that but damnit on behalf of women we are not pansies and have just as much cunning and strength as any guy. I say Duo should dress the part and go hang out with some pregnant ladies, it'll be an eye opener for him to see that although whining is a premnant part of being with child, being female... |
Reviewed By: whiteguineapig25 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2005 00:06 EST
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i have been following your story for a while, but this is the first time i have gotten around to writting a review. what i want to to say is that this story actually make since compared to most mpregs i have read and that i think you are a really good writer i have read most of your stories and all of them were really good. please contuine updating
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Reviewed By: Kimpisces [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2005 19:50 EST
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*does a little dance* yayayayayaya! my idea was used!! lololol I can't believe that Shenlong used my idea...okay so maybe she had it planned this whole time but at least I can be happy that I did review with that idea like five times lolol *giggles* okay right, I must be calm for a second and pity Heero *sighs* awwwww poor Heero-kun. He was sacked in the balls due to the evil babyseat of doooooom *shakes her head* stupid evil babyseat of doooooom right...*goes back to jumping at the fact that her idea was used* yay! go wufei being really smart and knowing how to put in the babyseat ^__________________^ okay I really got stop now...*sighs* well I have been wanting for that for like months!!! (well maybe not really but still........) I'm happy, that was an awesome chapter...and the second I started reading it and I saw Heero was looking for the instructions I was like "YAY! Heero and Wufei are going to attempt the babyseat of doooooom" ^_^ Yes..so I'm strange..yeah I really have to stop now..so I just want to congratulate you on the great chappie and I would have reveiwed earlier but mm.org was down *shakes her head ~KIM~
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Reviewed By: Kimpisces [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2004 10:04 EST
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*jumps around skipping* yeah, Heero and Wufei are going to attempt the babyseatt of doom...Heero and Wufei are going to attempt it...nahnahnahnahnahnahnahnahnahanah ^_______________________^ I'm happy! this is one of the points in the story I've been waiting for forever *nods* well for as long as I knew about the babyseat of doom *shrugs* eh, that's not important...great chapter and Miracle bit Heero lolol!!!! poor Heero..I can just imagine when Heero and Duo are in the bed and Duo starts moaning and Miracle thinks Heero's hurting Duo again ....muhahhahha ...okay I'm done *sits down and waits for the next chapter*
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Reviewed By: AnimeDuneJediElf [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2004 09:56 EST
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Now this is gonna be fun, watching Heero attempt to tame the baby seat from hell. LOL! *|Mari|*
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Reviewed By: Yanagi [MediaMiner Member] On: December 30, 2004 19:29 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I had the baby seat from hell. I can't help but LMBO as I imagine Heero wrestling with one. Please continue ASAP.
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Reviewed By: Tetsumi [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2004 19:38 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story!!!Update soon!
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Reviewed By: inulover16 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2004 16:42 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOL that was great with the ice cream thing and all...its good that Trowa got it out and that all turned out well for them..I can't wait to see what happenes next now that Heero is home and can't wait to see what happenes when Heero finds out that they have a new dog and all...ja ne
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Reviewed By: Kimpisces [MediaMiner Member] On: December 24, 2004 17:33 EST
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yay!! heero's home!!! okay you have to do something else with the carseat of doom!! lolol you just have to, it's what i've been waiting for, for like ever!!! lolol *Coughs* that was very interesting..poor Trowa choked because of his nighttime fun lolol Can't wait to see the next chapter ~KIM~
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Reviewed By: AnimeDuneJediElf [MediaMiner Member] On: December 24, 2004 15:41 EST
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YAY! Heero's back! Now we can see more Heero and Duo fluff! ^_^ *|Mari|*
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Reviewed By: AnimeDuneJediElf [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2004 18:44 EST
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Oh, that Trowa. *shakes head* *|Mari|*
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Reviewed By: AnimeDuneJediElf [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2004 13:35 EST
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Now Duo won't be so alone until Heero arrives. I can't wait! ^_^ *|Mari|*
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