"The perfect guy and a stripper?" Reviews/Comments [ 60 ] |
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Reviewed By: jackieT On: November 25, 2003 20:16 CST Comment/Review: I really like your story and I hope you keep updating!!!!
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Reviewed By: Katina108 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2003 13:32 CST Comment/Review: good chapter, the grammar isn't that bad, can still understand what you're wanting to say.. um.. I like the story, but if Hojo is alive, will he press charges cause inu ripped off his arm?
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Title: asap,kool Reviewed By: adamm On: November 25, 2003 09:04 CST Comment/Review: that was so kool what u had inu do to hojo(lol)that whole ripe the arm of this body that was kool. hurry with the next chapter i cant what to read it so HURRY!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Kaye [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2003 14:08 CST Comment/Review: Second option funny. Lord FLuffy!!!! Really good chapter.
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Title: asap Reviewed By: adamm On: November 11, 2003 09:17 CST Comment/Review: hurry with the next chapter i have to read the part were hojo get his ass kicked mortal kombat style.so hurry
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Reviewed By: anonymous2 On: November 10, 2003 20:14 CST Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: please update soon im begging you
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Reviewed By: Inu Girl On: November 09, 2003 12:23 CST Comment/Review: KILL HOJO KILL HOJO KILL HIM NOW !!!! I'LL KILL HIM ME SELF !!! HE SHOULD NOT TREAT A FEMALE LIKE THAT I'D MAKE HIM SUFER BY CUTEN OFF HIS DAM MAN HOOD AND MAKEN HIM EAT IT !!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: INU'S BABY On: November 09, 2003 12:18 CST Comment/Review: update soon you asshole
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Reviewed By: Ericyamaha89 On: November 08, 2003 22:18 CST Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: i gust finished chap four and i really cant wait until you put chap 5 up cause i wanna know if hojo will finally die
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Reviewed By: Ericyamaha89 On: November 08, 2003 21:29 CST Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: i read the first chap just now im not sure if you alredey have but yeah a sango and miroku realationship i think would be good in your story and i like it a lot so keep writin
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Reviewed By: AV On: November 07, 2003 15:33 CST Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: AWSOME MORE I NEED MORE THIS IS A GRRRRRRRRRRRREAT STORY
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Reviewed By: LadyHanyou On: November 06, 2003 11:37 CST Comment/Review: yay! time for mad ass kickin of HojoI hate the jerk. He messes uo the Inu/kag pairing all the f***ing time. The ass kicking will be much enjoyed...
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Reviewed By: RavenShadow [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2003 11:54 CST Comment/Review: I really like this story so far! Hojo as a bad guy is kind of hard to swallow but you are doing a really good job of painting him in a dark light. I hope you update soon this story is really cool!
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Title: asap Reviewed By: adamm On: November 04, 2003 14:25 CST Comment/Review: u must write i command thy to write write write write.just kidding well i hope that the next chapter will come out soon. i like the way u potray hojo that was kool(lol)well the fight that will come in the next chapter i hope will be good. well plz hurry with the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Precious [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2003 14:18 CST Comment/Review: I have seen other versions of this plot but yours is pretty good. The story itself is good and the characters seem to be pretty much in character. I do have to complaints though. One, you will have to go back and fix the spelling and mechanical errors in your writing; And you might want to add some dividers as well. Secondly, Hojo's dialogue (is that spelled right?) isn't the best. I suggest rewording some of his lines. Unless he is suppose to sound like that. If so..I retract the comment. But I guess it won't matter either way, seeing as InuYasha is about to shatter his skull. Be looking for your next chapter.
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