| "Inuyasha's Summer Vacation" Reviews/Comments [ 32 ] |
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Title: Ah Un
Reviewed By: Angelove On: March 09, 2006 09:40 CST
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I realy love you story so far, And so you know, the two headed dragon's name is (im almost positive) "Ah Un" ^.^ I know, weird but I kid you not. please continue.
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Reviewed By: sh0rty [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2004 16:25 CDT
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really great story!...hope you update soon! :)
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Reviewed By: Nari On: February 11, 2004 17:53 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
If it's not tomuch to ask what is oden? and can you update pppppwwwwweeeeessssseeeee!!!!!
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Reviewed By: ixchen On: February 10, 2004 15:26 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
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this was a great story..i can't wait 4 more
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Title: yay
Reviewed By: Chokoreeto Ame [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2004 18:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok, I REALLY love this story but there a few problems. One your speling and grammar really needs to be fixed, at times I have to reread sentences more than once to understand. Also her name is Kaede not Keade, I don't know if its a typo or if you just didn't know how to spell it. The whole grammar thing kinda took away from my enjoyment but ignoring that the story is REALLY good and I'm not trying to flame you. I like how you've made a complex plot but there are still many questions I'm waiting to have answered. And I have a quick question...will there be any lemons in this fic? Oh btw your lime went over well. I guess that's it, wow that was LONG, well update soon and keep at it. Oh and please respond to my comments I want to know if I helping you or just being a major space-wasting pain in the butt. UPDATE!
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Reviewed By: Higurashi Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: January 29, 2004 22:58 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
luv this story and really gald u up-dated and can't wait 2 read more^_^
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Reviewed By: Faye273(NLI) On: January 29, 2004 00:19 CST
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Not too bad, but ya, kinda slow. I thank you for the update regardless. One major note: the voice is "Disembodied" not disemboweled.... that means to be cut into small pieces, usually the trunk is cut up so none of the organs/intestines remain inside. I know you were tired, but that's important.
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Reviewed By: Higurashi Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2004 09:21 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
really great chappy can't wait till u up-date again^_^
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Reviewed By: Faye273notloggedin On: January 25, 2004 03:46 CST
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Thankyou for another chapter. If you want honest critism... here it goes (don't get mad if you don't like what I say, you asked for critique). Overall, the lime was not bad; not great, but not bad either. 1st: The word "delta" it's a bit odd (and not really very romantic), it reminded me more of a math class than a romance. If you are toying with language, that's wonderful (more authors should), but it's either "hit or miss," and this was a miss. 2nd, Inu's language was kinda dirty for a romantic scene. He talks about wanting everything to be perfect, but for a woman that involves romance. 3rd, his language about when/where he "wanted" her seems out of place. Scheduling sex is NOT romantic. Lastly, Inu's monologue about Kag+Kikiyo... I'm not entirely sure. It didn't flow correctly to me. He seems to be kind of detached while revealing the inner-most workings of heart. Something about it rubbed me the wrong way (sorry I couldn't be more helpful with that one). I suggest taking a second look there. That's all. I hope you don't consider this a flame, and I hope no one gets all pissy. You asked for comments/critisism, and that's what you got. I hope you find this review useful for future wrting.
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Reviewed By: Little Rin On: January 23, 2004 01:07 CST
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Okay.... copied.... pasted.... Printing.... Will read I promise.... Now.... You will write more for me to print and read, right?
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Reviewed By: Inu_Yasha [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2004 15:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow at first i thought that the fic was going to have a simple plot. but the more i read the more the story line expanded. i am strangley drawn to it and will review again after chapter 4. this could be one of the best fics ever
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Reviewed By: synthetichopes On: January 19, 2004 16:00 CST
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two things that bother me: 1. it is kirara, not kilala. when they dubbed it, somebody obviously was lacking brain cells and put it down as kilala or some shit. 2. you switch between tenses too much. is it past, present, what? you can't use 'he performed the same ceremony' and 'tomorrow will be' in the same story... it could be 'he performed the same ceremony' and 'the next day would be' sorry, little things get to me. other than that, great story! you should do a lemon.
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Reviewed By: Sariyona [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2003 22:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
very good story! I'm enjoying it very much. Also Sess's two headed dragon is call Ah-Un (thanks to Rin)
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Reviewed By: Higurashi Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2003 13:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
luv the chappy really gald u up-dated and can't wait till yur next^_^
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Title: What happened?
Reviewed By: Faye273 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2003 02:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic! I particularly enjoy stories that allow Kag to become as powerful as she can be. I do have a few observations though, 1) If Kag+Inu were born only 1yr apart, and that was at the same time that Kykio was alive how is he 140? If he were that old, wouldn't he need to be born at least 90 yrs before Kykio? And 2) If Kag is a wolf deamon, why does she need an Inu-youkai's blood to survive her training? Shouldn't her youkai blood be strong enough? 3) Is Suki left her husband in the Feudal Era, where does Souta come from? My final quesion is simple... WHAT HAPPENED? You stoped writing. I will be heartbroken if you don't continue this very cool fic.
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