| "In the Game of Life" Reviews/Comments [ 29 ] |
Title: story
Reviewed By: nl On: January 24, 2004 20:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
i loved it at first it was a little too fast. u jumped into events too fast. basicly ure transitions were not as smooth as they should be. but keep writing! i am intriged by ure story so keep it up! ure getting somewhere!!
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Reviewed By: fireash [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2004 14:56 CST
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hope you update soon. oh by the way in my story When a Heart Melts the demon Rin is still pregnant. Sesshomaru just meant he lost it because he was taken from that world and the pup seemingly ceased to exist. both are pregnant. sorry to write this in a review but i tried to email you and it said it sent you a message when i didn't even write anything.
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Reviewed By: Trojin Relma Jennings [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2004 00:26 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
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Reviewed By: fireash [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2004 01:49 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow you wrote it with more details than i would have. i like it a lot so far. if you get writer's block on this i will help you out if not just do whatever you want with it. i will keep reading it.
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Reviewed By: Aurora_thorn (Not logged in) On: January 08, 2004 17:58 CST
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That was very interseting. It was so sad that Inuyasha died. I hope that Kagome will find him (or his reincarnate or whoever) soon. Please update, for your first fic this is really good. Until then, Ja.
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Reviewed By: notzathros On: January 07, 2004 07:41 CST
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Interesting start. Thanks for writing.
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Title: Cool!
Reviewed By: Faye273 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2004 23:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ooohh, can't wait to find out about the new "inu." Cool fic, don't stop writing!
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Reviewed By: fireash [MediaMiner Member] On: December 17, 2003 23:11 CST
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alright i won!!! sorry i didn't check this earlier. i didn't have it alert me. i like the other story you have started. when are you going to start on this one. if you need more info i will glady email you more. if you decide you don't want to that is ok. i may stop being lazy and write it myself after i finish my other story but only if you don't want to write it. thanks by the way for reviewing my story. i know i am leary of the rin/sess pairings too unless they have it where there is no father daughter relationship. that is why i separated them. he is young in demon standards. i wonder how old myouga is. any way hope to read more of your writing.
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Reviewed By: iy lvr [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2003 20:22 CST
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I like your idea fireash, afew questions though. 1.when you said "he is six" did you mean he is six when he meets Kagome or he was six when his family died? 2.when Seshomaru takes in is it the past Sesshomaru still alive or another in the line of descendants that has the same name? 3.when he transforms, does he transform into a demon or is he a human that transforms into a hanyou That's it. Sorry about all the questions.
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Reviewed By: Mizu no Megami [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2003 18:03 CST
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Can you make a sess/Kag one? I've been serching forever for one and can't find any good ones. It'll be new and I'm sure some people will like it. I'd like to see someone who actually has enough guts to write it...
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Reviewed By: fireash [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2003 01:14 CDT
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here is an idea. inu yasha dies either by following kikyo to hell or protecting kagome. either way. kagome goes to her time. tries to kill herself (slit wrists) and is rescued by a young man. he is the reincarnate of inuyasha. hey if kikyo was brought back then why not her love? anyway...sesshomaru had mated rin and had children. over the years his decendents were mostly human with higher senses. the reincarnated inu yasha is one of the desendents. the reincarnate has a tragic past of his own. parents and lil bro killed in an auto accident. he is six. he blames himself. he almost dies himself but has good healing powers. sesshomaru takes him in. inu also transforms when he is threatened. anyway he saves kag. she knows who he once was. they become friends. she goes down the well, he follows. he meets sess from the past. i will tell you more of my idea if you are interested.
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Title: a little over discriptive but wat the heck it sounds ok i guess
Reviewed By: Kiglo On: October 25, 2003 22:24 CDT
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ok i've been thinking fer like 2 seconds and came up with this inuyasha and kagome fite and inuyasha gets mad and leaves and dosent come bac for a long time(put it this way many days) and kagome blames herself.inuyasha is thinking of her constantly and decides to go bac and finds that kagome went out to find him.and then kagome finds somthing, somthing that tells her inuyasha loves her and now she is hateing herself for evrything she ever said about inuyasha hateing her.and she wonders y inuyasha didn't tell her that he loved her sincearly Kiglo
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Title: its just somthing ive been thinking of fer i dunno a year now
Reviewed By: Kiglo On: October 25, 2003 22:06 CDT
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hmmmmm....o i kno! u can make a crossover beetween the two and then make inuyasha and kenshin fite (if u ask me id say that would be kinda boring but ahh wat the heck im stupid neway) kenshin likes kagome.kagome likes kenshis and inuyasha and inu and kenshin fite all the time bcuz they both love her (i kno i kno it sounds boring but im stupid i'll tell u that myself) im me my name is Pinkerdoo@aol
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Reviewed By: Hannah_Rosa On: October 25, 2003 19:07 CDT
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Can you write a story with KagxMir being somewhat of a pair b/ce, of course, Inuyasha's eternal indecisiveness? Can you make it close to the character's real attitudes as possilbe--no OOC or goofy stuff? I would really like to see it! Thanx :)
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