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Reviewed By: Lady Kaela [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2004 19:41 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed this story. Please update soon.
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Reviewed By: Inu Girl On: January 12, 2004 20:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW THAT WAS GRATE UPDATE IT SOON AND PULL KOGAS TALE SOME MORE THATS FUNNY . I thenk I know who the parings are inu/kag mar/son tak/kog .
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Title: It's got potential...
Reviewed By: Dragyn_Fyre [MediaMiner Member] On: December 25, 2003 04:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, I'm sorry to be a bit harsh (and long winded), but I found a few things that distracted me while reading the story. First, the grammer is off ~ switching between tenses, subject / modifier agreement and improper word usage. One particular example which sticks in my mind is where you wrote "Her emotions not being able to settle on only one emotion flung itself into a whirlwind of despair and confusion." Emotions are intangible, therefore incapable of action, and usually are not associated with any sort of reflexive pronoun, i.e. himself, herself, etc. Plus, the subject: emotions is plural and itself is singular. Another was you were doing really well with a scene, good descriptions, nice internal monologue, etc, then suddenly dropped running dialogue in the middle with nothing to support it (i.e. descriptions, etc.) It made me feel like I was seeing two floating heads playing tennis with their words. Dialogue is good and often necessary for developing a scene, but there are times when descriptive writing is much more appropriate than dialogue. Finally, there were spelling errors and some words missing from sentences. Maybe I'm just overly picky, but it is important to make sure you run a spell check and read your fic through a couple of times before posting just to make sure you didn't miss anything out. I do that and I still find errors when I reread it after posting! Again, I'm sorry to be a hard on you, but I wanted to provide you with an honest opinion since you have been so supportive towards my story. I do feel that both your writing ability and your story have definite potential if given a little more TLC.
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Reviewed By: Lanalyn [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2003 19:35 CST
Comment/Review:
great story so far! Can't wait til u update!
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Title: Great story!
Reviewed By: 12blue12 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 14, 2003 18:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
u got a really good plot goin i hope u update soon!
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Reviewed By: Katina108 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 12, 2003 23:25 CST
Comment/Review:
Wow!! really good chapter! I love it. Poor Takara, and it's so cute her pulling on Kouga's tail!! I love it!! hope you update soon!
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Reviewed By: Yumeni [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2003 05:21 CST
Comment/Review:
Thank you for your hard work and please write a new chapter soon!
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Reviewed By: IWantMoreIY On: December 11, 2003 04:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I REALLY LIKE THE WAY THIS IS GOING. Please, please continue writing such wonderful work. Am anxiously looking forward to more.
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Reviewed By: NekoFluffylover [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2003 17:12 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love your story, its really nice and i love takara.
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Title: love ur story
Reviewed By: NekoFluffylover [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2003 16:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story I wish i could write like that, and I hope you update soon
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Reviewed By: Relix On: November 24, 2003 05:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You're good, continue please.
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Reviewed By: jaded_2005 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 12, 2003 16:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I haven't seen many fanfics where someone goes with Kagome to the past, but of those I've seen, your's is one of the best. Takara is a very original character and her creativity in times of battle is wonderful. You're a very talented writer. Please keep this story going. Good luck!!!
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Reviewed By: Vellakitty [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2003 18:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was cold. No fare! You made a cliffy in the worst place ever! PLEASE UP DATE SOOOOOOOONNNN!!!!!!!!!! I'm dieing to know what is going to happen!!!!!! This is a great story KEEP IT UP!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: lil_sesshi [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2003 18:27 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i hope you can update soon it was so good.
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Reviewed By: Ericyamaha89 On: November 05, 2003 12:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is a really good fic but please update soon
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