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Reviewed By: rilia On: January 18, 2010 06:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was good for a while, really petered off at the end. Especially the glossed over end 'we don't know what were going to do now...Cloud offer to let Terra and I stay his place'. Even as vague end lines that lend speculation... It was just kind of blah. I hardly saw and kind of friendship even develop with Terra. She was a plot device to explain things in the shelter (the one that knows everything so the protagonist doesn't need to go find out stuff on their own/the author doesn't need to write believable expositions on things). The end really just felt like Zell was damaged and broken and unable to live so he picked a safe out - Terra who he barely knows and will always have a platonic relationship with, because he's afraid to face his old life (in Selphie and Seifer) in case he gets hurt again. And they go off to Cloud because he symbolizes things before they were fucked up. Those who saw him at his lowest while not at their own he is unable to deal with. Pretty much the only satisfying thing was he didn't go back to Locke... fuck that was messed beyond repair. Apologies don't erase things like that and Locke is not a strong enough character to work to make it right... unless he does an unrealistic 180 (he barely turned around anything with the apology, which makes sense) which would've been poor writing. So very good exploration of themes... I would have liked to see a bit of a healing process too though. A long arduous healing process. All that we are left with is a beat and broken person in the end and a cycle starting over in that of Squall at the prison... Perhaps it's trying to be commentary on the painful circle that is life but as Zell's story was never really wrapped up it falls flat on that too.
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Reviewed By: slasheroo On: April 27, 2008 09:32 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I stopped reading at chapter 12 I think..When Zell met Squall in the park? It was just starting to depress the hell out of me, Im sorry xD I liked elements of the story, but I hated the way that zell's parents just kicked him out like that. Man, that was so low. Your a good writer though! You can definetly keep a persons interest. I might go back and finish it, but I dont know. Man that Locke, what a heartless prick, neh?
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Reviewed By: sassynu On: April 03, 2007 11:29 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh it was beautiful so many plot twists and turns I didn't see any of it coming and Squall hooha he was such a bad boy which is a change for his character loves it. That Locke didn't deserve forgiveness he was such a jerk. I loved this story! I loved the end but why'd Zell have to go away sure it would of been akward at first but they could of worked it out. You have split my sides this story rocks Linkin Fantasy rocks, Final Fantasy ROCKS!!! Had a great time reading it, splee!
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Reviewed By: BeastBoy2K3 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 25, 2004 21:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is truly a great story Fantasy. I love the way you two write in your stories. Althoguh the ending may have been a little different from what I was expecting, I love it all the same. I hope you continue to write your stories. I can't wait to see what you're gonna dish out next in other stories. ~~BeastBoy2K3~~
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Reviewed By: Squallyalmasy On: May 21, 2004 21:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*wipes a tear from my eye* that was a beautiful ending very dramatic i envy your writing ability bravo was a great fic with a fitting ending
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Reviewed By: Kitsunefrost [MediaMiner Member] On: May 21, 2004 18:54 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
That...was so sad. But it got really emotional at the end and that was pretty awesome. Such a pity that this story had to end. Good work, Linkin Fantasy. My hat goes off to you.
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Reviewed By: Hurricane27 On: April 30, 2004 07:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've read up to chapter nine, and I still love it. But I don't like the vampire thing so far.
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Reviewed By: BeastBoy2K3 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2004 03:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a great story. Once again you have surprised me with your brilliant work. I just read your story "Kiss in the Wind" and thought it was great too. Keep up the good work Fantasy! I can't wait for you to update. P.S. Linkin Park Rulz!!!!
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Reviewed By: Kellie On: March 31, 2004 23:55 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
excellent!! Keep it up!!! Kel.
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Reviewed By: Kellie On: March 30, 2004 00:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent story!! Can't wait for the next chapter! Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: Kitsunefrost [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2004 21:38 CST
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ooohhh...things are getting good! Not to mention all the steamy Squall x Edgar goodness. *snickers* Can't wait for the next chapter!
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Title: Amy...remember me?
Reviewed By: AmyAnderson45 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 08, 2004 22:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's been forever since I've heard or even read your fanfiction, Linkin Fantasy! How have you been? Have you missed me? Anyway, very remarkable fanfiction you have here. It's pretty sad how Zell is being treated, especially by his own parents. I'm hoping things will turn out for the better for him and I'm happy to be your reviewer once more (actually I think it's my second review). Maybe I should review your stories more often? Sorry, I was just talking myself...it's nothing too serious...really. Anyway, hope to see you around!
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Reviewed By: Kitsunefrost [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2004 07:36 CST
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aaawww....poor Irvy! *huggles Irvine* The story is getting really good now! Can't wait for more. =^_^=
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Reviewed By: Kitsunefrost [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2004 03:55 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
I am really enjoying this story. That really freakin stinks how Zell's parents are treating him. What ever happened to unconditional love for your child? Please, update!
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Reviewed By: SidsPhantom On: December 10, 2003 22:31 CST
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I wanna no what happens jeeze my best friend is Bi and like I really don't give a Puck and all. But anyway nice story update pwease I love Drama. He's mom knows and she's okay with it and all but my parents think he's all gay so it's okay for me to live with him LoL oh yeah Update!
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