| "Innocent in the Dark" Reviews/Comments [ 17 ] |
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Reviewed By: thepersocomchi On: August 08, 2005 14:50 CDT
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Wow, that was very sad at the end. I'm only going to guess but, I'd say Shuuichi was happy. Even though in this whole story, he kept on doubting himself and putting himself down. In the end, he found out someone does care about him. T-T A very touching story,...but did you really have to make him die?
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Reviewed By: RabidFangirl101 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2005 23:29 CST
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T_T that... that was so sad!!! *wipes tears from eyes* Hm, this was okay, the scene near the end very touching... But somehow, I kept losing track of the story. I guess you could say there wasn't a smooth transition... or the stage wasn't set up. After all, I may not be the best person to point this out, but I just wanted to add that you could have explained the 'talk of the three realms' a bit more clearly... it wasn't until Youko said it at the end I knew exactly what he could do... But other than that I enjoyed this somewhat melancholy fic. It isn't often I see this pairing, but I sure enjoy it! ;D Heh, it's also not often that I see Shuichi depressed... I think the emotions for that were perfect, conveying the sense of sadness and despair, or just total non-caring he was feeling at the time. And one more jab at your story... when the demon side appeared, there was nothing leading up to it, so it was cut away from all of the tension and excitement you could have made... though perhaps you did... But I enjoyed this stroy... even if Shuichi died in the end. OH! When you had Karl use 'sayonara' that's an incorrect phrase... sayonara is referring to the fact you don't expect to see a person again, a more appropriate good-bye for them right then would be ja matte, or see ya... basically... Sorry I was so nit-picky, but when people misuse that, it annoys me.
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Reviewed By: Kuranga108 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 23, 2004 04:04 CST
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wow! great ending to a great story. that was wonderful & the ending was absolutely perfect. i'm sorry that Suichi had to die, but that was the best way to end it. *applause* great!!
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Reviewed By: Kuranga108 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 18, 2004 22:18 CST
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this is really good. i was a bit wary at first when Youko and Suichi were going to be together, but it's turning out really well. it's even more interesting considering they're the same person (technically). update soon, it's getting really good.
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Reviewed By: rebekah On: September 09, 2004 18:30 CDT
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please update soon s/y yay!
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Reviewed By: Shinigami_chylde [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2004 19:11 CDT
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umm...er...wow...ok...eh..i'm kinda...aw fuck it. its ok but i am lost as bloodly hell.
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Reviewed By: kageko On: July 25, 2004 17:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
amazing story, i can't wait to read the rest.
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Reviewed By: KuramaLover#? On: July 04, 2004 11:57 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oohhh, this is soooooo gooooood!!! I can't wait to find out what happens!!! Please write quickly and update soon!!! And keep up the good work!!!
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Title: Oooh!
Reviewed By: KitsuneLover [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2004 17:31 CDT
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ooooh! I love the new chapters!!!! You have to keep updating quickly please! This is an excellent story!
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Reviewed By: Kris_Pat16 On: March 28, 2004 02:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great job!! Update soon please!!
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Reviewed By: Yami Yue [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2004 22:59 CST
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Loved this chapter. I can't wait for the next one.
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Reviewed By: Kris_Pat16 On: March 17, 2004 02:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please update soon I'm curious as to what happens!
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Reviewed By: K_P12 On: February 25, 2004 00:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic is really great! You sould update soon!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Too Lazy to sign in - KitsuneLover On: February 13, 2004 22:11 CST
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I love the new chapter. You have to update as soon as possible. Please dont take long! I think I'm already beginning to see who the yaoi is between. Cool. Thanks for updating. Ja!
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Reviewed By: foxyfire [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2004 21:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
greatt story. please continue.you should do more.
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