| "Strength of Bond" Reviews/Comments [ 280 ] |
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Reviewed By: angelbabe17(nsi) On: March 24, 2005 23:07 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
agh too much japanese lol i have to keep scrollin down to understand wat theyre saying. but this amazing story is worth it. cant wait for more =D
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Title: You Go!
Reviewed By: lil ol' Ina On: March 14, 2005 15:48 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YOU ROCk! Now if only you would update more I would be one HAPPY camper!
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Reviewed By: angelbabe17(nsi) On: March 06, 2005 21:24 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
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Reviewed By: yuyu-inuyashaluva(nsi) On: March 06, 2005 10:32 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yes, yes, yes, you finally updated. i have been waiting. thank you!! now...another one please!?
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Title: Mistress of Sesshomaru and Ruler of the Left Hallway of Burford Hall
Reviewed By: Lillikyi_Wolf_Youkai On: March 04, 2005 11:07 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Would it help if I got on my knees and begged you to update? This fanfic has put me on the very edge of my seat and I have been drooling in anticipation of your next update. *Flicks tail* I know, I hate it when people beg me to update too, but I just can't help it. If you want to read some of my stuff, just use Lillikyi_Wolf_Youkai and look on fanfiction(dot) net. Once again, great job, keep up the fantastic work and please get the next chapter up soon! *Sesshomaru walks out.* Woman, stop pestering her. Sigh, what am I going to do with you? *Looks at author.* Damn wolf is driving me up a wall. Sorry, I'll take her off your hands. *Picks Lilli up* Fluffy, put me down!!! I'll get you for this!!! *He turns and winks at author while speaking to Lilli* Oh, I plan on it... *Evil grin.*
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Reviewed By: yuyu-inuyashaluva [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2005 18:49 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please. Update. your story is so good. i love the originality of it all and i would like to read some more.
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2005 21:07 EST
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Thank you for the new chapter! It's wonderful. I can't get enough of this story. I hope you update again soon. Thanks!
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Title: Part 3 (Oops)
Reviewed By: Ayapon [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2005 07:11 EST
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Perhaps having a scene that allowed the two to interact with each other further to foster a sense of connection would help to get to the point where they are comfortable enough to use the -chan ending. Another question: When Kagome first beheld the building they would be living in, why did she raise how low cost it looked? It made me feel like she was a snob. Is that an intention of yours in her characterization? If so, it seems to be at odds with what you've done with her up to that point and afterwards. I look forward to reading more from this story.
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Title: Part 2 of 2
Reviewed By: Ayapon [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2005 07:09 EST
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Also, when Sango immediately switched from addressing Kagome as "Mrs. Taisho" to "Kagome-chan", I had to pause. In the anime series at their first meeting (ep. 25), Kagome called Sango "Sango-san" while Sango did not address Kagome by name until ep. 27 ("Kagome-chan"). Kagome did start calling Sango "Sango-chan" starting in ep. 26, but that was after meeting and being around each other for a few days. In Japanese society, -chan is a very familiar/affectionate way to address someone. Upon introduction to someone for the first time, with no prior ties/knowledge of each other, and are roughly of the same age and societal "level", the polite rule is to address the other person by the -san ending. Only children tend to immediately address others of the same age with the ending -chan for the most part. Those older also call children (mostly female children) with the ending -chan. For male children older than 3-4 years (this age can vary a bit depending on the addresser), they are normally called with the ending -kun. Those of elderly age (or at least with a large age gap between the two) have the ability to address those younger than them with the ending -chan if they so feel like it (the benefits of age haha). It may be a benefit to have Sango use "Kagome-san" at their first meeting when Kagome asked her to no longer call her by "Mrs. Taisho". Sango just doesn't seem the type to easily and quickly cross personal boundaries within the first meeting of someone. Perhaps having a scen |
Title: Part 1 of 2
Reviewed By: Yfandes [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2005 07:07 EST
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It is fun to read your fanfic due to its interesting plot line and realistically intense scenes between Inuyasha and Kagome. However, I find it negatively distracting when I come across the odd Japanese word such as "hai", "daijoubu", and "oniichan" when it seems the English equivalent would work just as well, if not better. There seems to be no reason to use them as they are a little awkward and disrupts the flow of words you've already laid down. Sometimes they are used with reason (e.g. MSS) that I can understand. This also ties into my hesitation to believe Inuyasha would call Sesshoumaru by the affectionate "oniichan" in Ch. 15 since he is cursing Sesshoumaru (temee oniichan), is a teenage boy, and is in front of people he still does not really know (Miroku and Sango). "Aniki" might be a better choice, especially with the characterizations you have done so far for the two brothers.
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Reviewed By: essie2 On: January 15, 2005 15:46 EST
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this is great please update
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Reviewed By: Caprix [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2005 03:13 EST
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I've really enjoyed this fanfic so far and I'm looking forward to more of the plot being revealed, now that some familiar faces have appeared. I like how you've created a parallel society and I'm curious to see where you go with this! I just wanted to point out that many of the Japanese phrases you've used in the latest few chapters have English equivalents. The last two chapters read a little choppy, so I'd recommend losing some of the Japanese (though I'd keep "osuwari" since it's not just a simple "sit"). I like the name translations though! I'm waiting to see if they have some hidden insights into the characters! *wink*
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Reviewed By: happylama2202 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2005 12:20 EST
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Good chapter, as always. I really like your story and have been following it for a long time. I feel that I have to say something about the amount of Japanese in this one, though. I know the absolute basics of fangirl Japanese, which is still more than those new to the fandom know, that this chapter was almost ruined by such numerous chunks of dialog being incomprehensible to me. I really like Japanese, I think it has a sound and a feeling quite different than English and that anime often looses something in the translation. However, I would have to recommend scaling it back in this chapter because it's so very distracting. Again, it's a great story and thank you for writing it!
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Reviewed By: w_j [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2005 19:16 EST
Comment/Review:
Thank you for updating. I really like your story. I'm glad you are sharing it with us. :)
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Reviewed By: MiakaRyo [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2005 10:36 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey! I just wanteed to say that you have one of the most well written stories that I have every read. I loved chapter 13 and I love how your plot is going. Please update soon. I cvan't wait for the next chapter!!
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