| "Silent Confessions" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: R_Winner [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2004 03:41 CDT
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Chapter one was very confusing... I don't even know where to begin. For one, your lemons move way too fast, you need to pace yourself a little more... Two, you mix things up too much... If Ryou was pleasuring himself, his pant would be unbuttoned or off... Yet a few paragraphs latter you describe Bakura unzipping them and such. Do you get where I am coming from here, I think you have to go back and read over some of your work before posting it, cause if that made sense to you... Well I'd say you were one of a very special breed
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Reviewed By: TOTALYFAB [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2004 22:18 CST
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I like it. It was one of the more....interesting lemons I've read. Y/Y would be perfect.
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Reviewed By: Black Angel Reaper [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2004 16:56 CST
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^_^ Veeery nice, YokoRyou, especially w/ the Anzu-bashin' and the ending. Heh, they certainly are very...energetic in their love life, ne? *coughs* Yeah, a Yami/Yugi lemon would also be nice, cuz then all of my fave pairings are in this story. Oh, and if u could show Yami's reaction to Malik and Marik in his room, I would love that a lot. Update soon!
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Reviewed By: Tayko [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2004 09:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is great please do ch 2. one thing. howcome bakura took ryou's pants en boxers of if ryou was jacking off? it's a great lemon keep writing! much love ~*Tayko*~ (sorry if i wrote something wrong i'm from the Netherlands hehe bye)
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Title: Great
Reviewed By: Haibara3 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2004 17:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic was great. I did find a few spelling errors and iy lacked plot but as far as Yaoi is the topic it was great. I didn't really get some parts at first like the magazine excuse I thought Bakura said it as an excuse to get Ryou but it was Ryou who said it right anyway I really liked it plase update.
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Reviewed By: Black Angel Reaper [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2004 10:51 CST
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Uh, just 1 question YokoRyou. If Ryou was jacking off before Bakura came in, why did it say that Bakura took off Ryou's pants and boxers? But other than that, I think it was a very good lemon. And please, do a M/M lemon and as much Anzu/Tea bashing as u can, I would love that. Ja ne!
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