| "And We Were Angels" Reviews/Comments [ 240 ] |
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Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2004 22:59 EDT
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Radditz should think before he speaks... he makes a snide little comment about none of Vegeta's "heavenly brethren" coming around and lo and behold Bardock the Beautiful drops by for a visit. Wow - that Aiesha twist should be a doozy! I didn't know the woman across the big pond spelled her name that way...
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Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2004 10:19 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
How in the heck did I miss that update? God, have I really been THAT out of it? I don't know why, but that was my favorite chapter so far. I love Radditz, the evil little devil, and I like how Vegeta interacts with him. Poor Bardock, I hope Bellona recognizes him fast, if not the poor bastard might get stuck with that crazy woman over in England...
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Reviewed By: LisaB [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2004 16:27 EDT
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Oh goody! Radditz is back and Bardock too. I was hoping you hadn't forgotten about them. Now, what mischief is Raddy going to stir up? And Bellona---I never saw that one coming! The plot thickens . . . Update soon!
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Reviewed By: Sun+Moon,Earth+Sky On: October 10, 2004 16:48 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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wow. i wasn't able to read ur updates for a long time, since i was so busy. I'm amazed at ow well this has come out, though i guess i should have expected it, coming from you. keep up the good work. update!
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Reviewed By: iron kitty [MediaMiner Member] On: October 07, 2004 14:11 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Excellent job! I especially liked the scene between Bardock and Vegeta... Vegeta is so bad... but hey, a mortal's gotta eat, right? I can't wait to see how Bellona plays into the thick of things... Great job, and I hope to read more soon ^_^.
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Reviewed By: Bardockgurl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 06, 2004 05:41 EDT
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:(( My poor baby!! :(( She doesn't even know he's there!! :(( :(( He's all dumbstruck and shocked - his poor little heart must be breaking!! :(( The woman he loved, the woman who bore his children there before him after all this time and she is unaware of it!! :(( The absolute pain my poor sweet sugar dumpling must be feeling!! :(( :(( ......... Eh, that'll teach him to cat around with other women... :D
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Reviewed By: draegon [MediaMiner Member] On: October 05, 2004 23:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Vegeta seemed to be a bit agitated. Glad he got over it though. Well, this is certainly a change of events...Bardock's mate is Vegeta's nurse??? This is gonna to be good.
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 05, 2004 23:29 EDT
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what!? Oh, I didn't see that one coming! Goody, more intrigue. First sex and then pancakes--what more of the real world does Vegeta have to experience?
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Reviewed By: alenkahz On: September 29, 2004 21:02 EDT
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love both chapters. please continue. update soon
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Title: that was hot!!
Reviewed By: ~MeL~ On: September 28, 2004 02:15 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW!! That was SO intense!! I LOVED it! Theres nothing else to say really except that has got to be one of my favourite chapters! such a brilliant job you did!!
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Title: "And We Were Angels
Reviewed By: mlf On: September 27, 2004 18:56 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh i wanted to be bulma in this..lol..great chapter.i loved the way you wrote how he felt for his first time..we want more so much more.soon ok..maria
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2004 12:11 EDT
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oh there's the lemon! It was lovingly detailed and very appropriate. Sweet. I loved the line "he felt like he was dying all over again." Thanks for this scene. It was special. I really got the sense of something angelic in Vegeta's lovemaking.
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Reviewed By: draegon [MediaMiner Member] On: September 26, 2004 23:08 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, those last 2 chapters were amazing!!!! I'm glad Vegeta was moved to CC. And I'm also glad they finally got to be together. That lemon was beautifully written. I hope that being with Bulma erased some of the doubts he was having. I noticed he had to remind himself a few times as to why he gave up heaven.
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Reviewed By: Angela On: September 26, 2004 10:33 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story, It's like city of angels but instead of punctuating the emotions with imagery you use a different method. Exquisite
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Reviewed By: Evelyn (Vegge's Mate) On: September 26, 2004 10:18 EDT
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this was so sweet; i'm glad that you portrayed vegeta's insecurities and self-doubt since he is inexperienced; it made the whole lemon that much endearing. i want to say more but i am in a hurry! keep up the good work!
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