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Title: Is it possible for you to update this??
Reviewed By: inuyashagirl5 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2004 02:42 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this a lot...I hope a bit of inspiration drifts your way and gives you the needed boost to give us another chapter!
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Title: Update already!
Reviewed By: Melli a.k.a. WitchyTeen14 On: October 22, 2004 15:32 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Tiasha [MediaMiner Member] On: October 02, 2004 13:23 CDT
Comment/Review:
I'm absolutely loving this story! It so well-done and personally, I don't find it that OOC. I've read some that are way beyond being OOC and can't even finish them. Keep up the good work! I can't wait to read the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: sha_kenren On: July 28, 2004 18:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
another great chapter!!!!!!! please write more^_^
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Reviewed By: InuyashasDemonGrl [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2004 20:05 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*stands up and claps* bravo! bravo! can't wait for another chapter!
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Reviewed By: savay(again, being lazy) On: July 23, 2004 19:40 CDT
Comment/Review:
fuckin' awesome!!!!!
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Reviewed By: RabidFan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2004 00:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Auugghhhh!!! This is so good please update!!!--RabidFan
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Reviewed By: CSHayden On: July 15, 2004 08:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've been enjoying this story quite a bit since I discovered it in a websearch. Your writing is strongest when you stick with one character throughout a scene -- when you start jumping into everybody's heads for their POVs (like that scene with all the Sohmas in the waiting room), it gets VERY confusing. This is a common beginner's writing quirk that most people get over as they write more. You can fix this by remembering: Show, don't tell. Make the reader part of the action -- don't tell them what what's going on, SHOW them. I really like the interaction between Kyo and Tohru -- they're perfectly in character and believable as their older selves. Akito is positively creepy -- I'm sort of looking forward to seeing what you do with him. Fortunately, Kyo & Tohru's child won't be part of the Zodiac (I read somewhere that there can only be one person with that particular Zodiac curse at a time -- the full zodiac is present in the Sohmas at present) so whenever someone realizes that, it'll be a big weight off the parents. Or Akito will twist that to his advantage. One never knows about him, eh? I'll look forward to your next installment! Keep writing!
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Reviewed By: whitchhunterR On: July 12, 2004 21:37 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is even better than any of them i have ever read i reall y like keep up the good work and dont let people tell you how to write your own story i think it's awesome the way it is keep it up and update quickly!! Sayuri Shitaka
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Reviewed By: ShiiChan921 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2004 13:51 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey!! i really really really love your story!!! its so good--i love Kyo Tohru pairings! i also really like the fact that you have little side stories, not just the main thing. i'm a little confused as to who Shigure is with, buti'm sure whoever it is will make him happy. Kyo's so cool in this fic too! he's the cool mr. protective and so sweet to Tohru! yay! kep up the good work, and good luck on your dentistry-i hate the dentist too! i hope everyone has a happy ending--do you really think Momiji has doctor potential? interesting...
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Reviewed By: Inubunny [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2004 06:24 CDT
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another great chappy!! i can not wait for the next udpate!! it will surely b just as good as the last!! i love this story and hope u update soon!! and much love never forget the love!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: lil sesshomarus girl [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2004 01:26 CDT
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hey can't wait to finish this, I got to know what happend to poor akito (that little brat needed it)) GO HANA!!! like I said can't wait to finish this..
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Reviewed By: BuchouComplex On: July 11, 2004 22:09 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, that was a cute chapter and i loved how protective of Tohru Kyo is. It was so cute!! I can't wait till the next chap update PLEASE update soon!!
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Title: mo5cook
Reviewed By: macbaby1 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2004 21:47 CDT
Comment/Review:
I love this! Oh Shigure has been a bad boy...I hope your wisdom tooth surgery goes well, and I am sure we will all be waiting (some not so patiently for your update). Take your time and get well!
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Reviewed By: Maria jose On: July 06, 2004 18:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
omg i found a furuba fic that didn't make me want to curse at my computer and the author ! Your fic is wonderful ^_^ please keep it going. I'm looking forward to more.
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