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Title: new chappie
Reviewed By: ~JuSt-An_OuTcAsT~ [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2004 09:07 CDT
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I got kind of confused in this chapter...Since when does vegeta want a record deal?? This is interesting nonetheless..I recommend some Jpop for him to sing! I will look up some lyrics for you if ya want, but right now i am at school...hehehe..i have no life...One suggestion, if you use microsoft word, do a spelling and grammar check to make usre those typos don't stay. Peace, Jao
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Title: new chapter
Reviewed By: ~JuSt-An_OuTcAsT~ [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2004 00:21 CST
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This new chapter was better thant he last, though i thought the chapter needed to be there. I hope you post a new chapter soon i am very curious. Oh..uh...what exactly were vegeta and bulma doing in english...? I got some odd ideas there! Write more! Jao~
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Reviewed By: ~JuSt-An_OuTcAsT~ [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2004 15:24 CST
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Reviewed By: ~JuSt-An_OuTcAsT~ [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2004 15:23 CST
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You= write more! i have to tell you that most high school fics are cliche, but i like this one. see, OOCness is the key to making a real story good ^_^ write more it is nice!
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Reviewed By: Chiku On: March 13, 2004 17:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm really starting to like this story. It really is one of the original B/V stories around. Please keep on the good work.
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Reviewed By: ~JuSt-An_OuTcAsT~ [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2004 21:34 CST
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Wow..i have not read one of these in a long time, and i am sad to say i am HOOKED. PLEASE write MORE!!!! ~Peace~
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Reviewed By: ~JuSt-An_OuTcAsT~ [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2004 21:03 CST
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I like this fic so far, and i think it has some originality. I want you to keep writing it please! But i must suggest indenting each time a different person says something, becuase it makes it not slur all together, you know? ~Peace~
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