| "The Love of Legolas" Reviews/Comments [ 25 ] |
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Reviewed By: Serenitychan13 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2004 16:16 CDT
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SO! D*NG! CUTE!!!!! I don't see Legolas getting nervous about anything... well, nothing related to battle anyways... I can definitely see him as a nervous wreck before his wedding... (See "The Most Nerve-Wracking Day Of My Life" for ideas concerning a nervous wreck. Or h*ck, think of me before the Easter Vigil mass that one year. Remember, I was addicted to wintergreen-flavored Binaca mouth spray? I was literally INHALING the stuff!!!) CALL ME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Title: Ya want I should take care of 'em?
Reviewed By: Serenitychan13 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2004 20:07 CDT
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I've still got my ultra-loud whistle and my power as ultimate CHAOS. Shall I unleash the full power of CHAOS on the... SqUiRrElS!?! The bad bad sQuIrReLs!!! Just let me know if you are in need of the power of CHAOS. I'll back you up all the way. CHAOS is a powerful ally and will battle always for honor! (As in, ya diss my best friend - I'll unleash the full power of CHAOS on the world at large.) - not literally. But I wish I could so you wouldn't make my best friend feel bad.! So THERE.
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Title: GRRRRR!!!! *swearing*
Reviewed By: Serenitychan13 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2004 20:01 CDT
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DON'T DISS MY BEST FRIEND!!! YOU WILL FEEL THE WRATH OF THE RAINBOW CHIPMUNKS!!! CHAOS IS NOT HAPPY WITH YOU!!! And it's NOT SMART to make CHAOS UNHAPPY!!!
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Reviewed By: Guthwyn On: April 10, 2004 07:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'll give you credit for at least reading the appendices of The Return of the King. Except for one thing: Ellorohir. I have no idea who that is. The twin sons of Elrond are Elladan and Elrohir, but I have never heard of Ellorohir. This plot is horribly over-used and boring. You also don't seem very old, either. It shows in your grammar, spelling, and lack of knowledge about Middle-earth dialect. I mean, have you ever heard of someone saying 'ya' in Middle-earth? Yeah, I didn't think so. The names of your original characters need some major revision also. I mean, what kind of elven names are Halliel, Willow, and Kiroa? K is, in fact, very rarely used in the elven languages. And Halliel... the only thing Halliel contains is -iel, which I believe is a feminine name suffix in Sindarin. Actually, perhaps it's -riel. And Willow... just, no. Perhaps you could look up the Sindarin word for 'Willow'. I just did for you, and it's 'tathar'. The mutilation of Eowyn and Arwen's strong characters into giggly women who pack too much for journeys is, quite frankly, sickening. And to write it off by saying 'Oh, we're women, so we pack more than you do' is both stereotypical and pitiful. I suggest taking this story down and either re-writing it or making some serious revision. To find a beta reader, which you need, you can go to Google and type in 'Lord of the Rings beta reader'. You should get some results and once you've found a good editor, you can send the fic to him/her.
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Title: Love of Legolas
Reviewed By: ND On: April 09, 2004 21:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor grammer, punctuation and spelling. No research. Cliched concept with no characterisation. Classic Mary Sue. Very poor and your other reviewers are lying to you. This need much work and less Orlando Bloom fancying.
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Reviewed By: Serenitychan13 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2004 06:20 CDT
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Oh yeah... BANANAS!!!! *insane laughter*
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Reviewed By: Serenitychan13 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2004 06:19 CDT
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KYAH!!! KATIE I TOLD YOU TO PUT UP THE REST OF IT! DON'T DO THIS TO ME AT 2 IN THE MORNING! (By The Way: I took my Cowboy Bebop fic down and fixed it up. The prologue and Ch. 1 are posted right now. Now its just called Chaos. HAHAHAHA!)
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Title: Don't diss my best friend!
Reviewed By: Serenitychan13 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2004 16:27 CST
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It's ok Katie. I just got 4 horrible reviews on my Cowboy Bebop fic. Should I take it down? Read it and tell me! Cos I already started on the sequel... hehehe... Oh, and when IS your spring break? We really need to go ahead and have a BFTSOW (Bestest Friends Therapy SleepOver Weekend!)!!! Call me soon or the bad chipmunks will eat all your pasta. Yes... the chipmunks will take all the dirt back to Xcharyon. Beware the CHIPMUNKS! *HAPPY HAPPY CHIPMUNKS!* BANANAS!
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Title: Unexpected Romance
Reviewed By: Grandmother Aredhel On: March 28, 2004 22:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's good. But there is also another story about a young elf who fell in love with Legolas too... But that is another story.
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Title: Who else would it be?
Reviewed By: Serenitychan13 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2004 22:45 CST
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SO CUTE!! You had BETTER put up the rest of it soon! (Read my Cowboy Bebop fic! Its called Serenity, Known As Chaos) (Not a self-insertion.) (Expect drama and sad stuff and a little ... meep...)
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