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Title: lemon and...WRITE MORE!!
Reviewed By: nightspiritfox [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2004 14:09 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok i've writen a lemon for another author but i hope u have aim cuz my email is shut down but ill write it for u.and i want u to write more in ur chapters.and i want that clay pot DEAD!!!i hate her...ne ways update soon
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Reviewed By: Blood_lust_Vampire [MediaMiner Member] On: April 29, 2004 22:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a good start. Keep it up.
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Reviewed By: smittin kittin [MediaMiner Member] On: April 29, 2004 18:03 CDT
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This story seems really interesting. I think it would be even better if you slow it down & give us more background info. Remember we don't have the benifit of being inside your head so we need the details in order to fully enjoy the story your telling. Don't get me wrong I like this fic the idea is really good & I'm sure the story could be quite compelling. A lot of people have trouble writing lemons so don't stress. I only write lemons so if you get a chance check em out they might help you w/citrusy details. Hope I was helpful. Keep writing & I'll keep reading! Good luck!
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Reviewed By: A.R.Y. On: April 29, 2004 14:52 CDT
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Aww! Honestly, this fic was a lot better than I expected it to be. I kind of got a leetle bit too interested from the start. Now I love it ^_^ Therefore, I believe it is your duty as an author to hurry up and post the next chapter before my mind begins to wander! (Basic summary of this rambling review-love the fic, must have more=^.^=) -AY-
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Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: April 29, 2004 12:16 CDT
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this is great fanfic please update soon
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Title: how about
Reviewed By: zoingy On: April 24, 2004 21:58 CDT
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how bout they have a little more solitary romance in their little dome for a couple more days and then they come out and kag's pregnant and then they have some youkais comin after them to try to kill them because now they are now like the most powerful youkai out there. Then after inu kills some of them, he shows he's powerful enough and then it gos back to normal, with the normal idiot youkais comin after the inugumi and such and then kag has a GIRL (inu's so cute with a little girl....dont ya think....aw he'll be sso protective of his little girl...anyway) and then they go back to kags time and tell her mom (she can tell her sooner if you want. I think they should have some kinna power so they could hide their true features. Like an illusion spell or sumthin......(takes a breath) and they tranfer and raise their child between times and so on and then inu gets in fights with the other guys who like Kag (hojo, kouga...etc. I think he could fight with them sooner or even before the baby * hey your choice* anyway) Well you should get the rest from there!!!lol ^_^* didnt mean to write your whole story...he...hehe...um bye. *dashes out of sight* Have a good time writing your story. Your a natural so go out there and write!!! lol bye again!!! signed: zoingy
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Reviewed By: zoingy On: April 24, 2004 21:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Man YOU RULE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Dude this fic RULES!!!!!!!!! Your a genius man!!!! Keep it up!!! This zoingy gives u a 10 outta 10!!!!! whOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: angel0fs0rr0w666 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2004 21:26 CDT
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wth! you better update!
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Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2004 21:17 CDT
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omg omg omg that was too too short it was getting good when it just end please update soon
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Title: Niiiiiice
Reviewed By: antisocial mint (not logged in) On: April 24, 2004 14:51 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is such a cool story i love how he kept his ears and still became a full demon! where are sango and miroku during all this? are they gonna get out anytime soon? hehe inu the shrine maiden !! really cute PLEASE update, i hate writers block!!
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Reviewed By: K005 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2004 12:20 CDT
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i absolutly positivley loved it pls update
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Reviewed By: angel0fs0rr0w666 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2004 18:43 CST
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thank you thank you thank you! i liked it! keep going please!
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Reviewed By: Hino Mitsukiko [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2004 15:39 CST
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Hmm...you could've gone slower in the 1st and 2nd chappies...and made them be more in-character, and what happened to make Inuyasha lose the Tetsusaiga? And where were Miroku and Sango? And how would Inuyasha know all that stuff about his Youki if he wasn't taught anything? And how would Kagome know how to heal wounds if the only thing she can do now is shoot purifying arrows? She hasn't had any training that would allow her to do the things you said she did. And wouldn't Naraku be there to take the Shikon no kakera? 'Cause he'd be able to get through that barrier easily. And Inuyasha and Kagome were NOT in-character. Kagome is too much of a 'good-girl' not to protest what Inuyasha was suggesting, and Inuyasha is too stubborn to admit/suggest the things he did. If you could revise the 1st 2 chappies - that'd be great and you'd get more ppl to read your fic. If you have any questions//comments/responses to this review or in general, ask me - I know everything about Inuyasha.^^ Jaa na and happy writing!
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Reviewed By: Faye273(NLI) On: March 31, 2004 22:56 CST
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I love that Inu gets some of Kag's power. In most stories it's only Kag who gets some of Inu's strenght.... but since it is sharing shouldn't Inu get something too? Way to go. Hope to see more soon.
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Title: WoooW
Reviewed By: angel0fs0rr0w666 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2004 20:03 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
cooooleo!!! that was cooooool!!! i liked it! ... is there going to be... uh... any.. hm... okay, sex? hopefully, i havent read more than 2 fanfics without a lemon in it... shame on me. pervert---> is me...
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