Title: well....
Reviewed By: parietti [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2004 15:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
OK, I'll be honest. Overall the story is..O.K. I must admit, there seems to be a lot of fluff, too much verbal writing too. Also, you need to get you "s and commas in order, many grammar errors. Try using a bit more descriptive without going over board, in the first 2 chapters there seems to be a tenseness going on with Inuyasha and Kagome. Yet, their dialog is very plain. I hope you story gets a little bit more interesting, the same old things happen in both chapters, you added a little flavor with the Naraku thing. But, the 'giant scorpion' part was totally unnecessary, it seemed to me that you just added that in their for length purposes.
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