Title: Don't know much about this fanfiction...but oh well.
Reviewed By: AmyAnderson45 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2004 08:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi, my name is Amy! Even though I haven't seen the Legacy of Kain or the Tekken series game, I decided to read something different for a change. Your fanfiction is good and all, even though there were some parts of confusion. You should think about using some commas (or some semicolons) here and there. I read the first couple sentences and there was just no pause whatsoever, especially in your dialogue. I know it happens to me sometimes, but you really should fix that. Anyhow, it's very interesting (including the characters and their personalities) but try to cut back on the run-on sentences just a bit. I'm sure that when you correct these little errors, your fanfiction will flow much nicely.
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