Title: I like it, update soon!!!!!!!
Reviewed By: A New Hottness [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2004 23:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this fic alot. But there's some grammar problems. Like too there's too many fragments, missing " marks and misplaced commas. You can't just say, "Inuyasha smiled." But you can say, "Inuyasha smiled happily enjoying the company of his friends." I don't want to tell people how to write but fragments stop the story from flowing nicely. BUT I STILL LIKE IT THOUGH!!!!! Update soon and keep up the good work, JA NE!!!!!!!
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