| "Coming Clean" Reviews/Comments [ 232 ] |
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Reviewed By: KitsuneLover (not signed in...i'm a lazy one) On: January 19, 2005 21:55 CST
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I LOVED IT!! Ooooh, keep going!
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Reviewed By: Candy? On: January 19, 2005 19:56 CST
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Three words: UPDATE OR DIE!!!! *hiss*
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Reviewed By: dark ice13 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2005 18:47 CST
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When will this torture end!?!?!?!?!?!?!*Wails and sobs for 10 min. 'til abrubtly stops but still looks sad.*Spoofytatious is based on the word my cousin made.Spoofy is just great while Spoofytatious is more then great and/or any other similar words.I made this word up like awile ago.That was so SPOOFYTATIOUS. You left a cliff hanger you EVIL creature!
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Reviewed By: raindrops On: January 19, 2005 18:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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oh no! poor hiei-kun! quick kurama! i'm scared! what if-- GAH! i can't wait for the next chapter! >.
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Reviewed By: Sikandra On: January 19, 2005 17:48 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow! you updated so fast! i am happy! and i don't blame you for poor hiei's situation at all--it has to get worse before it can get better, right? RIGHT??? ok, maybe not...anywayz, update soon, k??? and if u have time, update Bugs soon too!!! those are my two fave stories of yours...
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Reviewed By: katy123 On: January 18, 2005 13:46 CST
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That was great
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Reviewed By: Dark ice13 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2005 09:22 CST
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Dude You hurt our cute little Hiei!!!!!!I mean honestly what did he and Kurama ever do to you!? Oh well as long as theres a happy ending I will be just peachy!By the way The chappie was so ...so.... SPOOFYTATIOUS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Kruanga108 (not logged in) On: January 17, 2005 23:39 CST
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another great chapter. it's pretty amazing to me that Kurama can still hide his full emotions from the rest of the team when he's really torn up about this. and about Hiei, one word...ouch. using a sutra? now that's just wrong! since you're going to be spell/grammar checking, i'll wait a while, but please try to update soon. new chapters are a must!
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Reviewed By: MikaSamu [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2005 19:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank you for updating so quickly, although we're still left with a cliffhanger! Just like Kurama, not to show the full extent of his pain, not knowing what inadvertant effect that might have on Hiei. Poor Hiei, and now Kurama will somehow be informed of what is happening to him? Always good to go back and polish a story, but selfishly I hope you will add more chapters soon.
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Reviewed By: Tetsumi(not logged in) On: January 17, 2005 18:43 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great update soon!
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Reviewed By: SweetMisery1 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2005 16:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please continue. my only constructive critisms is that 1. occasionally you write a paragraph about some one, and then then do something else, and when you go to some one else, they are reacting on the first action ex:Kurama gets off the bed and walks out the door. when you go back to Hiei, he is seeing Kurama getting off the bed. 2. you should mark scene changes i hate to critsize, but i think it will improve your writing. SM ps. i hope this didn't sound like a flame
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Reviewed By: Dark ice13 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2005 10:49 CST
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Well since my they won't take my login I shall hurt them(Not really I mean how can I?) That was so awsome It was Gerr-ate!Update soon Please!
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Reviewed By: MikaSamu [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2005 09:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another terrific chapter! For a moment, Hiei seemed almost too domestic, but I loved the bored Hiei getting a writ from Koenma, cleaning the apartment spotless in 15 minutes, and in desparation turning to a cooking show. I suspect for the health of their long term relationship, some additional accomodations are going to need to be made. I particularly love the darker side now coming back into the story. Very nice touches with Yusuke, Keiko and Kuwabara. I certainly did not anticipate Hiei being taken! Whatever will Intaro do to him, and what will Kurama do?! Please, please come back soon.
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Reviewed By: Kuranga108 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2005 00:32 CST
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wow. this is a really good story you've got here. i wasn't expecting to stay up this late (it's 12:30 am) but as soon as i started reading this i couldn't stop. the beginning was great what with the demons after Kurama and all and Shiori finally hearing the truth. i'm even accepting Hiei & Kurama's relationship in this story b/c it's so kawaii how Hiei acts around him & Shiori. it works really well. and now this Intaro guy has captured Hiei...this just keeps getting better. keep it up! update soon! oh, & just an observation, Kurama is an emotional wreck in here. :)
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Reviewed By: Sikandra On: January 16, 2005 21:56 CST
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OMG U HAVE TO UPDATE SOON!!!!! PLEASE!!!!!
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