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| "A Fight" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: Neko Kurama [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2004 16:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
An eventful battle, not many can pull that off. Good Job. Names popped up too much, it kind of disrupted the flow. I don't think I could help you find out where you could place more "he"s but I sense improvement is possible. The originality is down because, heck, it's just a fight. I don't mean you should change that, it's good that way. You are really talented at this genre, but I see many places where you can improve. Personally, I think you need to find an author that writes in a similar style as you as an example. Or just practice, or even better, both. Keep it up.
| Title: Hmmm....
Reviewed By: Pahhur [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2004 12:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think I recall this fight... You definatly have a lot of talent. How 'bouit this, me and you'll have a little one on one on RF. Then you write the fight out like this. For there I'll help ya put a story around it.
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