| "Delicia the Electric" Reviews/Comments [ 19 ] |
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Title: Sporks and Fries
Reviewed By: Dramauk On: June 08, 2004 21:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like the flow of the story and how you keep it at a conversational pace. Somethings that may add to the story would be addition of emotions to the story as a whole. Such as "Mikel," she screamed as she punched the wall next to the electrical outlet. With a sudden surge of power from deep within her the electricity all over...
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Title: Impressive
Reviewed By: the Dark Lady On: June 05, 2004 19:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked it. *chuckles* I think you focus on your disclaimers more than your story though. I'm impressed, please keep writing.
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Reviewed By: AineSironaTsuki [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2004 10:30 CDT
Comment/Review:
*laughs* I'm in the Authoress's notes. Wondershon!
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Reviewed By: AineSironaTsuki [MediaMiner Member] On: May 29, 2004 20:26 CDT
Comment/Review:
*laughs joyously* Now, isn't that some stuff! Get one with the next chapter and my introduction, already! *waves a hand dismissively,taking an imperial pose* Go on...
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