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| "Destiny's Child" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] | Reviewed By: Zaxlan On: July 12, 2004 20:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You've got a really good story going on here. Don't worry about the reviews because for some unknown reason people don't review to stories as much as they used to. I see amny stories with 15-20 chapters and they only have 4 reviews. If I were you I'd be greatful for the reviews I have. They just think they can read the stuff than leave. Maybe you should mix a couple of more plots into here than just focusing on one main thought or idea. Just a helpful hint. One word- UPDATE!
[ Request Review Removal ] | Reviewed By: Lainey [MediaMiner Member] On: June 24, 2004 14:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Danni, maybe you should read over some other fics to pick up writing styles and ideas. (If you pick up particular ideas, make sure you ask before using them.) Yes "Shadow_Master", you do have a point. I did say that you needed to pick up CREATIVE ideas. You should pick up a good fantasy or even non-fiction book and analyze it. Look out for the plots. C'mon Danni, I've known you since forever, we've taken the literature classes and aced them. The way you're writing embaresses me, and I'm sure it'd embaress our teachers. You are writing as if you were a sixth grader. I suggest you take a break from writing this fic, and deal with whatever you're going through. Shadow_Master, you sound like me when I write my reviews. I'm so proud. Except it's true, look over Angelbabe17's stuff.
[ Request Review Removal ] | Reviewed By: Shadow_Master On: June 23, 2004 21:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to agree with "4U2NV", this story is going a bit slow. Don't take this the wrong way because it's good that you're taking your time, but you don't need this MUCH time. If you re-read your reviews, "Lainey", your very first reviewer, had stated that if you decided to continue this story you would need to be very CREATIVE. Re-using scenes from the Inuyasha series is NOT being creative. Just because "Aitu" compliments you on your story, and "inspires" you, doesn't mean you should ignore your other reviewers. It's good that someone gives you the encouragement you need to go on, don't think I'm trying to discourage you. I think your story is okay, I'm not really sure how Lainey can flame "Angelbabe17", she is a really good author,(you could learn something from her), but that's her issue, not mine. I hope I gave you some pointers. I suggest you go and read "Rozefire's" works. That is "inspirational".
[ Request Review Removal ] | Reviewed By: 4U2NV On: June 16, 2004 19:13 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to say that my "enjoyment for this fic isn't that great. It actually seems to be moving slow. REALLY slow. Maybe.. you can do something about that?
[ Request Review Removal ] | Reviewed By: Aitu [MediaMiner Member] On: June 16, 2004 18:12 CDT
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yey! Another chapter! I liked your twist on things-- especially how Kagome isn't such a push-over and how she is quickly becoming the boss. hehehehe- I like how there might be Surprises! They are fun! I'm honored you feel honored! And thanks for the dedication again :D As for whats with the "that's a big 10-4 rubber ducky, over and out" that came from the bob and tom show, maybe? don't know if you've ever heard of it. We used to say that all the time instead of "goodbye" on the phone, hehe. What's the question for me? PS- here's the Sesshoumaru/Kagome thing I saw -- just a shortened up version-- that I thought was good- Sesshoumaru tells Kagome that her name seals her fate to him. Higure means Sunset. The sun always sets in the west. He is lord of the western lands. "No matter where the sun goes in its travels, miko, the home of the Sunset has always been and will always remain the Western Lands."Hence, this Sesshoumaru has always known that when night comes, you will return," "And you will always acknowledge that you belong to the west and its master." I cut out a bunch of words inbetween the quotes, but isn't it pretty?? hehehe I thought so. =) Talk to ya later skater! --Aitu
[ Request Review Removal ] | Reviewed By: 4U2NV On: June 15, 2004 15:35 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't wait till u update!
[ Request Review Removal ] | Reviewed By: Aitu [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2004 13:34 CDT
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What in the blue hell?!??! It cut off about all of my review!!!!!!!! And I wasn't signed in so how did it sign me in?!?!??! I even wrote the not signed in part and AHHHHH, I'm scared. But also sad at the same time because I had this big long review all written for you and now I'm afraid that it is gone forever =( Now what did I all write? Let's see, I guess I'll just have to start over and try to remember everything. First ohh, AWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!! I feel so honored to have a chapter dedicated to me, this has never happened before, I feel so special, hehehe. I'm glad that I could serve as an inspiration to you. At least my curiosity has paid off for once? Well I'm working on this whole being patient thing, and I'm not quite sure how it is going. I'm guessing that since I've been super busy with things that it's not a big deal right now. And it also helps that you update so often! Yeay for you! I think that after every chapter I am always going to have a million questions, 99.9% of which you will tell me that you cannot answer because it will give away the entire plot, and that would just not be good, lol. But I understand, I even like surprises, so no worries, be happy. I still like Dai, even if Kagome doesn't haha. As for the rest of the pairings, who cares if you don't have it all figured out yet? A lot of great writers just take what they have and go with it from there, adding new things when they see fit. It's fun not to be tied down by constraints and to just go with what ever seems right at the moment. I'm sure that who ever you decide on will be perfectly fine. Okay, just one question, does Sango know Inuyasha and Miroku? Will Shippo be in this story? How about Naraku? Will Kouhaku be turning bad then? Did Dai leave the village about the same time as Kagome and will they be running into each other along the way? You answered when Inuyasha will be entering but what about Sesshoumaru? Was/Is he lord of the western lands (I heard the most beautiful thing about him and Kagome if that is what the pairing will be and I will share it with you- hehe, or maybe you just want to know anyways.) ( I forgot what you said earlier again, but this time I'll go back and actually look for my self) How did one question just turn into thirty? Ah yes, so it seems that this review has now turned into a novel so I guess I'll take my second try at posting it.. This time I'm copying what I wrote before I try to post it. Well, Hasta Luego, that's a big 10-4 Rubber Ducky, over and out! (I got bored with "Ciao") Keep up the truely amazing and enjoyable story! I can't wait to read more. --Aitu
[ Request Review Removal ] | Reviewed By: Aitu-- Still not signed in [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2004 13:16 CDT
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Looking at things from all perspectives is good because then you truely know what you are talking about (Yes, I spent May term taking a stupid Philosophy class called the basic questions that were not basic by any means, and now I have all of the sayings and quotes from it in my head >.
[ Request Review Removal ] | Reviewed By: Dreaming_girl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2004 18:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic is off to a great start! Like Lainey said, did you try html tags? It's pretty confusing, not knowing what the thoughts are and what the narrator is saying. I hope you update soon. ~Ciao, Dreaming_girl
[ Request Review Removal ] | Reviewed By: Aitu (not signed in) On: June 13, 2004 20:48 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ah- so the plot thickens and so does my interest! So many questions now, lol. Probably close to a million! Does Kagome like Dai like that? Is he going to die? =( And I'm taking it that he likes her like that? Does he know where her dad is? How much older is he than her again? I forgot, and I think it was mentioned before but I'm feeling too lazy to go back and look... >.< I think that those two together would be an okay thing ( just in case you wanted my humble opinion...) (( Yes, I'm being a dork right now-- hehe)) Yey for Kagome, run off and do what you want! And will she be meeting Inyasha and then sometime soon? All of em, or just a few? Feel free to ignore all of my questions if you would like, lol...............*big thums up* (yea, I'm trying to bring that back... okay, so not really, I just wanted to say that) Good work!!! I'll be attempting to wait somewhat patiently for the next chapter. Patience was never one of my virtues but somehow I mannage. Until next time-- Ciao!
[ Request Review Removal ] | Reviewed By: Aitu [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2004 15:09 CDT
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Hey there, I just wanted to let you know that I think you have a great start to your story. I hope that you continue to write and update very soon, hehe. I really like the Dai-guy character. (no I didn't mean to rhyme right there.) Keep up the good work and I hope to hear more from you soon. Ciao! --Aitu
[ Request Review Removal ] | Reviewed By: Lainey [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2004 16:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Danni, even though you can do many things, I'm not sure writing is your thing. I hope you're catching on to what I'm saying. I was wondering what was going on with your italics, but I have no idea how to do it. Try using HTML tags. What's with your chapter titles? Miracle? Where's the miracle? This is an okay fic, but it makes me feel bad because I said "angelbabe17's" fics weren't that good. If anything her's are better than yours. WAY better. If you decide to continue writing this, I suggest you be VERY creative in what is to come.
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