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Reviewed By: freelova [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2007 19:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi, I'm relatively new here, no I haven't wrote any stories, but this was a particular favorite, you should dtill go along with the Kurama/Neji pairing, I think this is a good look for Neji fans, its really great!
| Reviewed By: NoodleSub [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2006 21:04 CDT
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*reads last line repeatedly* no . . .no . . .NO~! worst possible time EVER to leave us hanging. Guh, last update 8 months ago *send inspiration* it's not . . .discontinued is it? Gosh I hope not. I stared readng this like a year ago, and forgot about it when it wasn't updated for a while, but I'm back, hoping for a nice ending(with a happy Kurama/Neji couple). I have my fingers crossed. Great story, bad cliffy, my english teacher would be horrified at my loss of correct sentence structure.
| Reviewed By: Ravenlockes [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2006 18:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great fic so far. I've been reading this for three days straight, in between school of course. I think you should keep it a Kurama/Neji pairing, because I see Naruto-kun as more of a brother to Kurama-san, and I like Neji-san. I don't want him to die! Anywho, I like the story so far, keep up the good work and maybe update before Christmas? Ravenlockes
| Reviewed By: Miststalker [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2006 13:38 CDT
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Sorry to be a wet blanket on this fic, but get rid of the 'author's comments' DURING THE STORY! It breaks up the flow of the story and makes it annoying to read. This is a good idea, but is full of author comments and asides that I can't continue reading it.
| Reviewed By: raykay [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2006 22:29 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
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| Reviewed By: crazy-chick14 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2006 16:44 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
om my GOD!! this is very very good!! i love it!!the whole thing is great and jut brilliant!!i hope you keep the neji/kurama pairing because its uniqe you know? and i hope that sasuke comes back(to be with naruto!! i just love does guys)to the good side!!^^ and wouldn't it be funny if kuramas friends found their way there too!!hahaha...well that was just an idea anyway the story is great and i hope you update soon, i'm sure other people are waiting for your story ok? keep it up, its excellente!!^^
| Reviewed By: NekoKaru [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2006 16:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm not normally a big fan of crossovers, but these are two series I absolutely love, and I couldn't resist. And, to be honest, when I first started reading this story, I was of the opinion that I wouldn't enjoy it very much, because of several detractors. I just wasn't sure I was ready to commit the time necessary to read such a long fic, when already there were some things that were bugging the heck out of me, like the numerous caps locked words(italics is always better for emphasis, hands down). Curiosity made me continue reading, however, and I'm very glad that I did. The funny thing about stories such as these, which span such long time periods, is that a reader can come to actually notice the improvements in a writer's abilities. And improved you have. I was really drawn into the story, and was quite displeased when I had to go to bed at 2 in the morning last night, and leave it unfinished. You've blended Kurama into the existing manga wonderfully, and the deviations you're taking are clever, and quite believable. It's gotten so that I really can't wait to find out what happens next, and what steps you take the characters in to. I am a little disappointed at how little Shinrin is mentioned now, though. He was such an interesting addition, and added an extra bit of personality to the story. His subservience to Kurama was also really adorable, and the possiblities such a companion commanded seemed promising. I know if I were Kurama, I'd have him turn into yummy things, and the like. I'm a silly boy. >.> Oh, and since it doesn't seem like you've had anyone respond to the yukata/kimono stuff, and seeing as how it seems to be a constant thorn in your side, maybe I can clear it up. ^^ Yukata are just cotton kimono worn during the summer. There really isn't that much of a gender differentiation when it comes to kimono, other than the types of obi worn. As for my vote for the pairing...hmm..while I was never a big fan of Neji pairings to begin with, the way you've had them bond has convinced me that he and Kurama work in this setting. The same goes for Naruto, though, as well. The bond between Naruto and Kurama actually seems to work better though, because Naruto has found someone with whom he can not only be relaxed and comfortable around(even cry around), but he can also relate to him with all of his demonic issues. The kind of bond that was formed when Kurama was able to break through years of traumatic and emotional abuse that Naruto had suffered EASILY suggests that an emotional/physical relationship between the two would be highly likely, if not inevitable. Put that kind of trust together with three years of being alone together, and who knows...Now that I've thought about it, I think I'd prefer a Naruto/Kurama pairing, though I wouldn't object to it being a triangle with Neji. I think it's amazing that you say this story is being developed as you write it, and not planned out ahead, as everything seems to flow so nicely. I truly look forward to your next review, and hope that you can get to it quickly *crosses fingers* Uggh...long review o.o It's a shame you don't see more crossovers of these two series, especially ones with as much promise as this one.
| Reviewed By: Oriya-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2006 08:07 CST
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I am going to be totaly honest with you. When you first started writing this, the way you wrote made you sound like an airhead. Not to be rude, but that turns off potential readers and makes them think badly of you. I know when I read the first chapter, I was asking myself why I was clicking on the next chapter and not the back button. The only thing that changed my mind was how long it was and how many reviews you had. I knew that if it was that long, and it had that many replies to it, the story had to have gotten better with time. I'm not trying to beat you down about your style of writing, I just wanted to let you know because there is a possibility that you scared off many people who would have reviewed your story because of how you wrote it. You did loose the airy sort of way that you were writing in abrupty around the last part of that story, however, and the story was alot better read than it had been before. Another thing, was all the crazy things that Kurama was doing. It got to the point where he was more of an OC then anything else. I'm not trying to be mean or anything, and you can deleate this review if you feel that I am wrong. I did think this would be a good story to read, I liked the ideas you were putting into it and how you're incorporating the manga and anime into your story. But I think it could be done in a more subdued way. The Neiji and Kurama pairing I think would be good for this story, but I did not agree with how far they went when they were kids. Kids!!! I think that you skipped out on alot of detail aswell. The point of reading a story is to get a picture of what is happening in your head. I find it hard to do that when there are major chunks of detail missing from the script. You can try and fill it in yourself, but I find that it makes you want to stop reading and think of your own story. Like I said before, this is a good fic and I would recomend it to anyone who was interestind, but I think they might have to get past that airhead sound that your words have and really get the story. Don't be discouraged and keep writing. You've had plenty of other reviewers tell you that you were great and everything. What's my critisism? Ja!
| Reviewed By: Yabun [MediaMiner Member] On: February 20, 2006 14:55 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yosh! I love it! It's a crossover, it has two of my favorite animes in it, and it has yaoi; what's not to love? It's extremely well written and it leaves the reader anxiously waiting for more (I know it does to me). I vote for Neji/Kurama as the pairing. Naruto needs to have a brother-like figure, and Kurama is the perfect choice. I've always been a fan of GaaNaru and SasuNaru, even some ShikaNaru myself. ^.^; Thanks for posting your fanfic, ja ne! ^.^
| Reviewed By: Yuikey [MediaMiner Member] On: February 20, 2006 14:03 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This a great story. I really like this crossover. You really did a great job with that. I vote for Neji/kurama/Naruto
| Title: Whoa...
Reviewed By: Ceer Uchiwa [MediaMiner Member] On: February 18, 2006 09:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa... tat was, no strike tat, IS da BEST Naruto fanfic I have EVA red!! Plz oh plzie plz plz PLZ continue da story! And PLZ dont kill Neji. I like him. And wut happened 2 da little Kitsune? I miss da 'Yes, Master!''s. Anyway, Plz cont and dont mind my grammer ^-^ It's currently 2:13am here so, yea... Im a obsesed fan and NEED to read next chappie. Plz? how many times can 1 say plz? =P -Ceer
| Reviewed By: Saphire Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2006 21:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh... my... god... I LOVE THIS!!! It is REALLY good!!!! only flaws would have to be the changing weight of the weights which you fixed! and of course... I have to wonder... (unless I misread something ^^') what ever happened to Kurama's little "pet"? Oh and... also... DON'T KILL OFF NEJI!!! BAD!!! *hits with bat* how could you even think that?!! T_T also Kurama and Naruto have more of a brother/brother relationship and it would be kind of odd if they got together... So yeah I think that it should definatly stay Neji/Kurama
| Title: OMG
Reviewed By: sesshomaru1986 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2006 19:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story Update soon I want Neji/Kurama/Naruto or Have Neji die and make it Kurama/Naruto
| Reviewed By: wynter89 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2006 20:06 CST
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i just read chapter 49. and i love it. you cant kill off Neji. i would die if that happened. i would rather you make it a Naruto/Kurama/Neji. Neji/Kurama would be the best but i would go for the 3 some if it meant not killing of Neji. i am soo glad that you updated. i keep looking at this fic to see if you did. and here i am writing an other review cause i liked what you did. i love the plot and how it is turning out. (just dont kill Neji) the main reason i read this was because Kurama was in it. then it caught my attention with Neji's and Kurama's relationship... Thank you. you made my day. good luck!!!
| Title: are you CRAZY!!!!!!!!
Reviewed By: wynter89 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2005 17:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i have got to say this is the BEST Naruto fic i have ever read, i loved it, and i must say that i feel in love with some of the characters. Neji is now my fav character now and near the ending i felt that Neji was neglected (sniff, sniff), then it is Kakashi and i dont care if he is a perv. i must say that i am upset that you gave up on this. i do HOPE that you continue. you got me hooked on this, i mean i never went with out a day to read this. i am a slowreader and it took me awhile to read it, but i loved it. i was wondering if somehow Hiei and the others would of showed up looking for Kurama, maybe they could help lift the cures. i am a hopeful fan, and i would love to read anything you got, but i hate it when authors give up, me myself havent giving up once, i may stop for awhile but never have i givin up one on of my fics because i start to think of fics i love and the authors stoped, so i try and continue. it is my ninja way, "believe it" if you ever have time you can always read my fics. my user name is wynter89, it is mostly inu yasha fics. they may not be that great, but i like 'em. anyway this has got to be the longest review i have writen. good luck may kami-sama be with you i want to say something, you explained everything so nicely. i understood what was happening when they did their thingies (^.~) and i loved the fox!!! sooo cute!!!!!! i want one now.
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