Title: Nice
Reviewed By: Lady Shay [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2004 11:05 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed the fanfic, and I do realize that it is rated NC-17, but somehow I think the little scene where Bulma decided to ruin Vegeta's relationship by pressing up against him wasn't hot. I think it was just thrown in there to cause sexual tension between Bulma and Vegeta and nothing more. I don't think she'd throw herself against him. I'm sorry if I sound like a bitch. I really like your story but please don't make it one of those "Bulma-and-Vegeta-are-attracted-to-each-other's-body-and-passion" becasue normally passion doesn't last and it's more often a heat of the moment thing. But if this is your style, keep it up. Very original idea, Saiyan Corps. And I love the title, peace up, Shay
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