| "The Adventures of the Masaharu Girls" Reviews/Comments [ 76 ] |
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Reviewed By: stevers On: March 28, 2005 22:46 CST
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GAAA!!!!!! THANKS KAZUME FOR LIKEING MY CHAPPY.......but why is it blue??????
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Title: Take 2
Reviewed By: anonymous reader On: February 22, 2005 20:30 CST
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With my abrupt finish and lack of time to type, I could not offer any contructionism... for that I apologize. I do find one thing in your story remotely amusing: Sesshomaru bound as a slave; but not a single other thing latches me enough to convince me to keep reading. The biggest advice I can give is to be more descriptive: describe the surroundings with enough detail to fill the reader's mind with colors and emotions, even fragrances and textures. This makes a story much more appealing to any reader, no matter how sullen the plot. Also, be sparse with your characters. Introducing a character can effect the entire environment around him, ie GIR leaves the all his surroundings with a metallic yet carefree feel and also distracts the reader from the main characters by changing the entire texture of the storyline. With a less sudden and demanding entrance, the lovable GIR(Zim rulz, btw) can be placed even into a Lord of the Rings environment, if he was stuck into the storyline. I apologize for being so harsh, but having read over 100 fanfics before and made friends with people who have their own entire sites dedicated to them, I review with sincere honesty. Also, as a writer I don't hold back because I don't want someone to hold back when reviewing my work or lie and tell me that it's good when it sucks. If anyone still wishes to beat me up, I've always been a free stress-reliever so hit me all you want, as long as it's the chest. O.o..
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Title: Monstrosity
Reviewed By: anonymous reader On: February 21, 2005 17:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a downright horrible fanfic. Of all I've read, this is just increduously stupid, plotless, and equal in intelligence level to Phillip Fry(Futurama). I'd offer a higher rating if I was told that it was meant for a cartoon character in actuality to read, but seeing as how that is humanly impossible, I offer no more regards to your work. Domo arigatou goziamasu, sayonara. PS. My name is not Matt, nor do I look remotely like Harry Potter.
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Title: hello! ^__^
Reviewed By: TaiyoukaiKuzumeoftheeasternlands [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2005 02:40 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is great! I get to read more! I hope Sessy doesn't get tooo bored while saving Kikyo'sw sorry clay behind, and that Steve will just go on and let Kikyo be on her merry way (until the Masaharu hell cats *cough cough* get her)...I'm being too optimistic aren't I? (i THINK it's optimistic....isn't that being positive?) ANyway..AWESOME CHAPTER AND PLEASE UPDATE! thank you! ^_^ Huggles to you all! ~Kuzume
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Reviewed By: SteveAnonymous [MediaMiner Member] On: January 29, 2005 10:37 CST
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*chants* I posted a chappy all by myself... I posted a chappy all by myself... I posted a chappy all by myself... I posted a chappy all by myself... I posted a chappy all by myself... I posted a chappy all by myself... I posted a chappy all by myself... I posted a chappy all by myself... I posted a chappy all by myself... I posted a chappy all by myself... I posted a chappy all by myself... I posted a chappy all by myself... I posted a chappy all by myself... YAY!
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Title: NO
Reviewed By: TaiyoukaiAyumuoftheWesternLands [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2005 23:52 CST
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YUKERS!!!!!!!!!!! how could you? i dont see your new story ANYWHERE!!!!! love ya's, 'yumu
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Reviewed By: TaiyoukaiAyumuoftheWesternLands [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2005 18:29 CST
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heh heh..........*sweatdrop* ^^;
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Title: AAAIIIEEE!!!
Reviewed By: HikariMakaiNekoTenmaoftheHigashi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2005 19:15 CST
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'Yumu...sweety...need I remind you that Mizu and Hikari switched bodies...that means that Mizu is in Hikari's body and Hikari is in Mizu's body... *huggles for 'Yumu* We love ya anyway and we'll work with it..unless you wanna go back and change it...^^ See ya'll!! ~Hikari~
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Title: Merry Christmas
Reviewed By: TaiyoukaiKuzumeoftheeasternlands [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2004 01:18 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wish u a merry christmas, and ty for updating, and i wish u a merry christmassssssssss...and a happy easter...? ^_^ anyways great chapter, please update, yadda yadda that stuf....HUGGLES!!! ~from, Kuzume ^_____^
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Reviewed By: SteveAnonymous [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2004 13:43 CST
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*tear drop* YOU DID NOT FORGET ME!!!!! *HUGGLES AYUMU* Thank you thank you thank you....... ok i feel better even though i have a cold....................................................................... ........................................................................... ........................................................................dar n snow....................................................................... ........................................................................... ..................................................
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Reviewed By: Stevers not signed in On: December 01, 2004 16:53 CST
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ummm......good....UPDATE!!!! I KNOW WERE YOU LIVE!!!!! lol i am sooo stupid.........anyway....Good....but YOU FORGOT ME AND THE CENTER!!!!! remember.....think yuki think.......anyway......ummm....laters.....*huggles all*
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Reviewed By: TaiyoukaiKuzumeoftheeasternlands [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2004 01:20 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yuki's gunna take ovr the world, do dah do dah.. They're starting with Sesshomaru's citadel, oh a doo dah day.... Gonna take over in the night, gonna take over in the day, I bet my money that they'll win, somebody bet that they'll stay... Huggles, please update!, Kuzume
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Title: "...."
Reviewed By: Ryan-Kun On: November 21, 2004 23:16 CST
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".................." TACOS!!!!! Hehehehehe Keep it up ^____^
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Reviewed By: SteveAnonymous [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2004 14:10 CST
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ok........crap........BAD BAD BAD BAD THOUGHTS.............BAD YUKI.....BAD AYUMU......BAD BAD BAD.........BBBBBBBBBAAAAAAADDDDDDDDD
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Title: 0 o BADDD THOUGHTS.........
Reviewed By: TaiyoukaiKuzumeoftheeasternlands [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2004 01:29 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Must.....KILL.....YUKI.....*eye is twitching and evil and bad thoughs lurk in every inch of brain* *foam comes out of mouth* update.....from kuzume
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