| "I am The Brother Of The Winged Knight" Reviews/Comments [ 41 ] |
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Reviewed By: DragoneyesBC [MediaMiner Member] On: March 15, 2005 05:52 CST
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~sniff~ I'm loved! ^__^ thanks guys. Also yes I'm trying as best I can to get better at the things Juu-Chan mentioned. The reason my 1st chapter suck is because I was so excited to get it up I didn't really care what it sounded or looked like. So thanks everyone!! ^__^
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Title: Mesa Juu-Chan...
Reviewed By: FennFeatherDragon [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2005 20:57 CST
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She has a point you know. i have been writing a fanfic myself that I will soon begin to post. Your comments are a little harsh. maybe you should read the entire thing then say somthing.
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Title: But wait! There's MORE!
Reviewed By: May-VeggieGirl1 (sorry, can't log in at the time) On: March 14, 2005 17:19 CST
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Sorry I ran out of characters and had to finish my little defensive rant in another review: this is still commenting Mesa Juu-Chan's review- Again, because your review was aimed with good intentions, I am fine with your ideals and am trying not to be a real pest. To me, Lor is like a little sister that I never had, so it's understandable if I am a bit overprotective of her feelings. And in the future Juu-chan, please try not to be so entirely pessimistic toward an artist's blood, sweat, and tears. Especially if they haven't been in the field for the longest of time.
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Title: response to Mesa Juu-chan's review
Reviewed By: May-VeggieGirl1 (sorry, can't log in at the time) On: March 14, 2005 17:10 CST
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Mesa Juu-Chan, it's very nice for you to give her your 'constructive' criticism, but it is a bit harsh. OF COURSE the first chapter is lacking critical elements, it's her first fic, first chapter! Doesn't EVERYONE'S first attempt lack many things? If you read the chapters following, you can defintely see it progress in many of the elements you listed were lacking. SINCE you haven't written anything yourself, you wouldn't understand how hard it is to write for the first chapter, or any chapters afterwards. Writing is a passion that must be overcome by numerous obstacles- including flamers, writer's block, deadlines, and life in itself. Anyone can read a book, but it limits to a very small populus that can have any potential to write something of their own. If in fact you have written something yourself, I'd like to see some guts displayed through action before through your bitter words and display it on the internet. I strongly believe that people that have opinions on these issues must experience the hardship of writing themselves and have enough self-esteem to put their name and not 'annonymous'. I'm very thankful you at least signed your review to her, but I please ask of you to try your own hand at writing. Also, I am slowly mentoring her myself in anything she feels she needs to change, while taking in and creating my own style at the same time. Melady101 also agrees with me, but her computer isn't loading mm.org right lately, so she cannot speak to you herself.
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Title: Mesa Juu-Chan
Reviewed By: Mesa Juu-Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2005 13:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well I must say that this story has potential; but, it is severely lacking in grammar and style. This could use alot more description; as your writing is fairly vague, and your grammar definitely needs improving. You have an interesting concept here, you just need to build on it more. This does not seem like you have edited it at all! Since there was a lack of description, writing style and grammar skills I could not get past the first chapter. It was highly disappointing. Especially when it seems like the story could be so much more! If by any chance you need a beta-reader just email me.
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Reviewed By: FennFeatherDragon [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2005 16:55 CST
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Nice of course baku would pass out. Why did you have to turn Zero evil!? Anyway keep going pleeeeeeeaaassssseee
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Reviewed By: Fluer On: February 15, 2005 21:29 CST
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HOly s*** Zero turned evil! Cool suming thing. How long did it take to think up the rhyme. Well whatever. Please update soon this cliffhanger is killing me!
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Reviewed By: May-VeggieGirl1 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 15, 2005 15:24 CST
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lol DUDE this is like RR! x.x.x.x.x gah. lol, aww, can there be a little BZ... *puppy dog eyes* this would be a great time for it ya' know. Still, nicely done, there are some new creative points that haven't been done yet (i think... gimme a minute, I'll find one x.x) oh, I liked the summoning it had cool rhymes. :p update!
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Reviewed By: FennFeatherDragon [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2005 15:48 CST
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Nice fight scene. But what is up with the dark ball of energy? Update soon
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Reviewed By: May-VeggieGirl1 (doesn't feel like signing in) On: February 10, 2005 19:15 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yayz Lor! And you did the whole fight scene by yourself!! ^__^ Hooray! *gives Lor cookies* Good job, even though it was longer because of the song. =^^= Still, keep up the good work! Hey, the dark ball is kinda like what Kiba did to Zero in my fic... O.o; man, there are too many relations...
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Reviewed By: May-VeggieGirl1 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2005 17:51 CST
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How could she torture Zero like that? Easy!! ^.^ Ohh, could you perhaps hurry up with your updates? ^^;;;
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Reviewed By: Fluer On: February 07, 2005 18:21 CST
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WAIT! NO! EVIL PERSON! What happens to Zeron!How can you torure Zero like that. Poor Zero I hope his bro becomes good in the end.
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Reviewed By: DragoneyesBC [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2005 19:25 CST
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You made a pic of Zeron?? Sweet who cares what color eyes you made him with I wanna see this!
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Reviewed By: Fenn Feather Dragon On: January 22, 2005 18:11 CST
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Zero having a little bro. I always thought he would be an only chid. oh well. Please put the next chapter up soon.
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Reviewed By: RW On: January 22, 2005 16:58 CST
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lolol, DUDE what's with older brothers and protecting the younger brothers! x.x meep! wow, you updated ALOT. O.o; Freakish... aww, but it really does look like there was something going down between B and Z... *pouts* Zeron has red eyes? Somehow I missed this and put up fanart of Zeron with greener eyes than Zero... x.x oh well.
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