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Title: Whered u go???
Reviewed By: Freaky-hanyou [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2004 23:09 CDT
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ok i was goin to show my friend ur story so i go to find it and im like where the heck is it? so i read ur author\\\\\\\'s note and i wasnt sure if u posted it yet so i was like NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!! lol but then i came and braved the strange new ff place.....*looks around* i like the ff.net because it has borders but heck is YOUR story sooo i follow it......OOOO btw i would LOVE to be on your Author Alert...thing....watever it is....so then i can know if you make any stories i can read! yay! keep up the good work! ~freaky-hanyou p.s my email is hanyouramen5907@yahoo.com p.s.s. boy o BOY did i have a fun time tryin to get this freakin thing to send....had to register and all....i think...
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Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2004 21:00 CDT
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this is great fanfic please update sooon
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Reviewed By: InuSessRoxx [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2004 16:24 CDT
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excellente, hope you update soon au revior mon ami (InuSessRoxx aka: sesshomaru_luver on fanfiction.net)
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Reviewed By: Ithilwen [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2004 21:49 CDT
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CHAPTER 11 (10): When Kagome says "Yea," is she trying to say "Yeah," or "Yay"? * * * CHAPTER 12 (11): "To the max" is very out-of-place. * * * That's a rather ingenious way to kill Naraku. I wouldn't have thought of it, but the similarity to the scene in which she breaks the jewel in the first place is very telling. * * * It sounds like someone's not as dead as he seems. * * * Up to this point, there's a lot of awkwardness in this story, but I still think it doesn't merit deletion by ff.net.
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Reviewed By: Ithilwen [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2004 21:34 CDT
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CHAPTER 4 (3): The little brother move is well performed. I like that your Inuyasha can tell Kagome's waking or dreaming from her breathing. * * * Heeheheehehheheee! Hojo and the trio showing up is just perfect. * * * CHAPTER 8 (7): "bolder," Sango's boulder. * * * CHAPTER 9 (8): Tiptoe is one word. * * * CHAPTER 10 (9): The image of Inuyasha getting hit in the head with a chicken cage is quite entertaining. * * * A lot of the words, "starkers" etc, seem out of place.
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Title: Chapters Two through
Reviewed By: Ithilwen [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2004 21:00 CDT
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CHAPTER TWO: "Cracked" seems a bit modern for a midieval child. Did she pick it up from Kagome? The extra w's are a bit annoying. * * * Hee hee! Miroku's married and still getting slapped. I guess the sparks are still there. * * * "baring" bearing * * * CHAPTER THREE: Okay, yes, it is hard to believe that the "need to pee" aspect of pregnancy would jump in that early. The need for frequent urination in pregnant women shows up only late in pregnancy, because the heavy baby is pressing on the bladder. I could have bought the nausea coming this early. Here's another idea: A lot of pregnant women, even and especially early on in pregnancy, find that food doesn't taste the same. Bitter things taste more bitter. This is an adaptation which helps the woman avoid eating toxic foods that wouldn't hurt her, but might hurt the baby. * * * I don't know if Inuyasha and Kagome would refer to each other as "chan." I'm not confident that that's how the expression is used.
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Reviewed By: Ithilwen [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2004 20:25 CDT
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Someone told me that you had a horde of deleted jems, and I think I'll make it my personal business to hold each one up to the light. So far, ff.net is rating pretty high on my idiot meter for trashing this one. * * * Threatening to leave just because he won't look at her seems like a manipulative trick, even if she'd tried easier measures. * * * It's a bit hard to tell whether the second scene is a flashback or not. Shippo becomes a teenager, so it must be at least five years after the events in the anime. Whether the rest of the story takes place then or earlier is not aparrent from this prologue. * * * "I'd bet a bugler wouldn't be half as scary as Sessho-Maru" (Snorklesnorklesnorkle) "The comp'ny jumps, 'cause he's the bugle guy. He's the boogie-woogie bugle boy Sengoku Jidai!" * * * Sweet and spicy; an excellent mix.
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Title: i love u!
Reviewed By: falling full moon [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2004 10:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is AMAZING!!!!! I LOVE YOUR WORK!!!!! I hope the transition from FF.net is easy for you, because of their crappy rules...it's gonna be okay here! I promise to ALWAYS read you!
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Reviewed By: Mizz Breadstyx [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2004 20:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Quintuple 10 ratings! I reviewed at FF.net but I can review again here! I love your stories and I hope your other fics come to MediaMiner too(so I can review again! lol)! And can I make fanart of your fics? Please?
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Reviewed By: oashisunoyume [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2004 04:14 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
just finished it..your other story sounds like it could be really good! the filming one that is...good job i really liked it!
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Reviewed By: oashisunoyume [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2004 00:40 CDT
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wow really good..havent finished it yet..but im almost done! ^_^ good job hope you write more stories!!
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