| "One Night Stand" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: Krystal-Nyte [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2005 17:40 CDT
Comment/Review:
Awesome work man! This is sooo cool!
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Reviewed By: Moon bind [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2004 07:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well for starters, you shouldn't repeat the character's names so much. Stuff like he; the raven haired beauty; the older boy etc.. exist just for that, so it won't become to repetitive. I would advise you to get a beta reader. That's what I did anyway ^.^ and believe me, I had the same problem you have. So, best wishes and keep improving.
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Reviewed By: Kat_315 On: August 19, 2004 22:49 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
good story... but still need a bit more romance....
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Reviewed By: mika_jurgen [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2004 02:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was great but there was something that seemd to be missing.
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Reviewed By: 457 On: August 15, 2004 04:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was good but you should have added more passion in the lemon scence.
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Reviewed By: G.K On: August 07, 2004 11:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
pretty good.
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