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| "Splicers" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: Wild Splice
Reviewed By: Tai Khan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2007 05:02 CST
Comment/Review:
Needs a lot of work. It's rushed. Ranma's fear of cats is completely ignored, or the cure for his fear was left unexplained. The bit about the 'clan head' was totally confusing. And finally 'gene-splicing' DOES NOT create another living being! That's 'cloning', and as presented here, with further genetic tampering. Not to mention apparent memory transferral. And then, there's the obvious infatuation of the writer for overly tall, muscular females (not that I'm complaining, mind you, but if they're all like that...where's the variety?). This also needs to be run through a grammar-check, badly.
| Title: constructive criticism
Reviewed By: Campin Carl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 01, 2004 15:51 CDT
Comment/Review:
It's an interesting concept, but you should use a little more description. Also, I noticed you kept finishing someone talking with "(Blank) said", or "said (blank)" You can't get a feel for any of their emotions like that. When Ranma told Haruka about Set, you should have added how he felt. Was he grim? Ecstatic? What? Also, are you going into the history of Ranma and Ranko? I may have missed something, but I noticed they seem to be celebrities, but we don't know why. I really hope you go back and tell what they did that makes them so well known.
| Title: constructive criticism
Reviewed By: Lord Aries Greymon [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2004 02:08 CDT
Comment/Review:
This sounds interesting. A little more detail would be appreciated though. Sincerely, Lord Aries Greymon
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