Reviewed By: KitsuneLover (not signed in) On: September 19, 2004 06:15 CDT
Comment/Review:
Alright, this was good, but EXTREMELY confusing. This is not a flame, but more of a friendly peice of advice, if you'll have it. You used the word Friend too many times, referring to too many people with it that you lost me. Now, that could just be me, cuz Inari-sama knows I'm slow, but I just thought that might clear it up a bit. However, it was a very good story, even if I think it a bit out of character for Hiei. No matter, though, because it was an interesting plot and a good one to dedicate to nine eleven. Well, I liked it and hope you continue work on your other fics!
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