| "Necessary Evil" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: AladdinAbu [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2010 14:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good read. I like how this is mostly a hentai fic, but your plot with Miyabi playing girlfriend to keep the Sakuraba off their backs is plausable. Haven't read past chapter 1 but I might be back for more :P
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Reviewed By: Myst Knight [MediaMiner Member] On: March 04, 2007 15:19 CST
Comment/Review:
I was talking on a message board about my making of a AYA harem saga, and the members directed me to this. So far, it's interesting and well written. Since you have Kaoru and Miyabi working together to solve problems, it's got me liking Miyabi a bit more. (normally, she irks me) Aoi's position has made her a more sympathetic character, and I hope she will find some time to enjoy love wiht Kaoru in subsequent chapters; Kaoru and Aoi have well-earned that right. It seems you're keeping with Ai Yori Aoshi's theme of dishonesty in the presentation of relationships. Here's hoping everyone won't end up completely miserable in the process.
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Title: A Good Lemon
Reviewed By: Terdwilicker [MediaMiner Member] On: August 10, 2006 18:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a really nicely written approach to Kaoru's relationship with the women in his life, and the complications that arise from having to keep secret his true love. It's nicely done, almost a definitive lemon version of the high points of Ai Yori Aoshi without being distasteful or OOC. I also enjoyed the sequel, Home.
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Title: WOW
Reviewed By: denisud On: July 11, 2006 04:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was a very 'adult' version of what the series had. You followed the canon storyline but dropped in Kaoru screwing everyone BUt Aoi, And I really can't wait to read your sequel to see this version of The Ai Yori Aioshi crew continue! Great way you weaved in the sex with the canon! dennisud
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Title: But there is still one remaining...
Reviewed By: thebigW [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2006 15:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I vote for the next story arc as soon as you can get to it. Liked Miyabi's driving skills on display (she reminded me of Nao Kadena of GTO in many ways, the ability to drive fast and the desire to race just two of them, the sizable assets on her chest just another two...). If Tina is...you know, then you just have to resolve it. Also, you had poor Aoi-chan waiting throughout this whole fic for, well, you know what for. Hasn't the poor girl suffered enough? Thanks for writing this. You are clearly a master of harem hentai. W.
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Title: Karou's return karma for all the beatings..?
Reviewed By: thebigW [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2006 09:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey now... When I said in my review of your VanDread fic that I'd check your NGE fic next, I actually was thinking about another author, and got a bit confused. This is what I was really looking to get into... (NGE and Ai Yori Aoshi - riiiight, so very much alike...lmao) Anyway, I've gotten through chapter 4, and I like everything about this except for Miyabi-san's actions in chapter 1, where I thought to myself, 'she loves and supports Aoi-chan, but would she go that far?'. Maybe it happened too fast for me. Tina-san, on the other hand, is a minx(but not a slut, there's a difference!), and I could easily see her falling into the role you wrote for her. As for Tae-chan... well, it's always the quiet ones, eh?. Well, I'll have to finish this, then get to your "Last Exile" effort. Ja ne! W.
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Title: ~Doku~
Reviewed By: Tsuki Shinomori [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2004 22:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very very good! I enjoyed everything about it and you had an exelent end! I'm also looking forward to reading some of your other works!
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Title: Sama
Reviewed By: Zauriel [MediaMiner Member] On: November 21, 2004 12:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hooray. Another Kaoru/Tina sex scene. Tina makes a terrific sexual partner for Kaoru.
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Title: Awesome!
Reviewed By: Zauriel [MediaMiner Member] On: November 21, 2004 12:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your fic totally
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Reviewed By: Tsuki Shinomori [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2004 23:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not too bad, i like how its not just lemony but actully has some story to it, its also cool to recognize sertain sceans fromt he manga. Overall pretty good I really don't like Mayu very much but.. w/e. I suspect there's gonna be a plot twist up ahead soon so yeah update.
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Reviewed By: zauriel [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2004 22:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Deja vu!!! This chapter brings nice memories of what I have read in manga and saw in the anime. Kaoru's first meeting with Mayu is repeated but is well wrtten. AWESOME! I loved the way Kaoru fucks Mayu. Mayu is much hotter than any girl even Aoi but except Chika. I really can't wait for Kaoru to fuck Chika. Yummy!.
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Title: Tyrenol
Reviewed By: Tyrenol [MediaMiner Member] On: November 02, 2004 15:22 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Couldn't've done it better myself. We definitely need more lemony stories based on these "underdog" series.
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