| "Freeport" Reviews/Comments [ 194 ] |
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Reviewed By: Patience On: March 07, 2005 01:58 CST
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At last there's a spark of something between the two. I was beginning to think you were pulling our legs about the 2x5 pairing. I was also afraid I was going to learn about every single person living in Freeport, know every section, street and sewer line and hear yet again about the non-existing government for the dregs of society before there was even a hint of a future attraction between the two. I suppose we've only met half of the population and we'll need to meet the rest before they figure out what to do. You're an excellent writer, and I think my only complaint is that I know more about Freeport than I do about the two main characters' lives after the war. And after repeated explanations from Duo about how Freeport is run, I'm wondering if Wufei is all that bright when he still can't get it and we're given the whole speel all over again. You've a very vivid imagination.
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Title: ch 16
Reviewed By: Ice-is Blue [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2005 00:53 CST
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Wow. That song's quite depressing. Duo's dancing stunt and Wufei's resultant sexual reflection were wonderful. And now they're a step or three closer to Carver. I liked Morgenstern, or perhaps I like the idea that powerful people don't have to be all dressed up to be respected... either one.
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Reviewed By: Pixie Smith [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2005 23:43 CST
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I just love it when Duo teases Wufei, it makes for such great reading. Also, it looks like Carver's going to take another life. Another beautiful chapter.
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Reviewed By: mel^_^ On: February 27, 2005 11:13 CST
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Yay, a chapter every weekend! Another reason to look forward to the weekend ^_^ I have the feeling Wufei and Duo are are ... not exactly getting closer, but they're starting to understand each other better. Now we just need some UST to make me happy. And after that some relieved sexual tension would be good... ^_^ Love your fics as always!
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Reviewed By: Schachzug On: February 26, 2005 22:06 CST
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I love this story ^_^
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Reviewed By: Pixie Smith (nsi) On: February 26, 2005 16:34 CST
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That situation that the ferret stirred up was really quite sad. It's always a bit sad to hear that innocents are killed, it just makes something twist in my heart. Loved the 'it's a date' jibe. So typical of Duo, and Wufei's reaction was amusing too. =="A society with ghettos is at war. It's just not the kind of war that has tanks and Gundams."== Wow. That's pretty deep.
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Title: chapter 16
Reviewed By: Enna Namo [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2005 14:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You better stay alive might be the worst to say expect 'it can't get any worse' which might be even more dangerous.
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Title: Ch 14 & 15
Reviewed By: Ice-is Blue [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2005 14:05 CST
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Good action narrative in 14. And 15... :D I've been yearing for that conversation without even knowing it. Can we have a Duo PoV soon? I've missed his brainwaves. Also, a small crit. (and this might just be me)... I found it a bit hard to situate myself at the very beginning of the chapter. I didn't feel fully in Wufei's head until a good 11 paragraphs in and it took a while before I understood where they were talking and whether or not anyone else was present (like the guy from Ch13).
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Title: Punchy
Reviewed By: vox dei On: February 24, 2005 21:19 CST
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The last two chapters were great. 13 was very methodical, with 14 the action came in quick bursts. Lao Tzu sector? The Freeportians must have seen something that I missed in his work. Thanks for the continued high-quality output. aquononascendet_AT_yahoo.com
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Reviewed By: Pixie Smith [MediaMiner Member] On: February 20, 2005 16:07 CST
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I liked it. Wufei's finally beginning to understand Freeport's system. Smart guy that he is, working it all out for himself. Hell, I had to have it explained, or rather, read Wufei's deductions to understand. lol. My all time favourite - "Was this the true currency of Freeport? A man's honour...The trust and backing of his friends...Was this his 'credit'? Simply his word?" It's certainly an interesting and novel idea. I adored it.
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Reviewed By: ?????? On: February 16, 2005 20:07 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Amazing
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Reviewed By: Enna Namo [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2005 04:57 CST
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Very interesting chapter. Looks as if Carver got careless or maybe simply bored? And with all the information Wufei is gathering about Freeport and him being so faszinated with its social system, I wonder if he would like to stay there to study it for real. OH, and you not only have to finish Freeport before you can start writing original stuff. I'm desperatly waiting for a new chapter of Source of all Things just to remind you.
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Reviewed By: Ch 12 & 13 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2005 18:22 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow... Ch. 12- I loved the visual that I got from Wufei doing his forms. Especially when you mentioned his ancestors doing it in the temple on Earth, in the battlefield, and on the hallowed stones of an Emperor's palace... I mean I FELT just how ancient the Dragon's Wushu was... *shiver* I love it!*sigh* Anyway, the attraction that was felt afterwards between them was too good! hehe! Ch 13- When this chapter first started I couldn't come up with any senarios as to what would happen. That's odd because I always come up with different possiblities as to what could happen. But this time I just couldn't see what was going to happen, where it was going to go. I couldn't wait until this update... it was pure agony waiting for this chapter! Now I'm excited... I loved the way Wufei acted as professional as possible, in Freeport, when handling the scene of the crime. Yay, the chase begins! I hope he catches the man with the "rat-instincts" I'm almost certain that he will but... you never know! All I can say is that everything in the fic just seems realistic. And that is something that I appreciate... I'm rambling now because I'm excited... forgive me. Great Job though and Update soon! ~*+NeNa+*~
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Title: Part 2 of Review
Reviewed By: Pixie Smith (nsi) On: February 13, 2005 17:39 CST
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On the other hand, your amazing talent deserves to be shared with the rest of the world. I mean, they're missing out on something brilliant here. If you published I'd be out at the shops and buying ten copies of your books in an instant. To publish or not to publish? Oh decisions, decisions. Good thing they're not mine to make. Tee, hee, hee. Whatever you decide, your fans will support you. Oh, and one more thing. Yeah, I reckon marketing sucks too. Bad books will sell well with the right marketing and wonderful ones won't without it. Oh well, their loss. PS - That chunky chapter is probably like the reviews you get, you probably get sore eyes reading our reviews too. Oh if only Mediaminer would let us use the enter button to space out our reviews. Oh well. Great chapter by the way.
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Reviewed By: Pixie Smith (nsi) On: February 13, 2005 17:36 CST
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Hi, I think you might want to re-upload this chapter. It's come out as one big chunk and it nearly killed me to read it! Though of course I had to read it no matter how chunky it was, because truth be told, at this moment in time it's my favourite story. So, yeah... Maybe check it out, something's stuffed up. Goodness that was a real eye-opening line. "Life is easier to lose than car keys in Freeport". I never though of it like that, but now it really does appear that way. Like, totally. You're right, this did need a gore warning. Talk about descriptive. LOL. "There might not be any police force and forensics team available. But by the Gods, there was at least one Preventer present, and he was going to do his job." Do you even know how much I adore Wufei and his duty-bound ways? I totally love this side of him. It's serious but I also actually find it very funny. He's so tight laced. "He had to bludgeon his conscious into submission first." Kee, hee, hee. Oh I adore the way you write Wufei. Yes I do. "Then, remembering the woman in the hall, he did his best to pull the man's features into something a loving partner could carry with her in her memory." This part here just reminds you that no matter how cold Wufei may seem, he's actually a real caring guy. Thanks for that little reminder Maldoror. Do you know, I'm in two minds about you and publishing. On the one hand, I don't want to share you with the rest of the world. I want to keep you here always writing brilliant GW fics |
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