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Reviewed By: Freak_Of_Nature On: June 28, 2005 04:35 CDT
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I can almost taste the lemony goodness XD I love the plot, very original. You're very good at writing lemons, btw. ^.^
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Reviewed By: lil' crazy head On: June 22, 2005 15:02 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW! U R Good!!! Just one question though, will the other Yamis be joning Bakura in the fic or will he be the only master of the Hikaris? Anywaaaaaaaaay. Update soon! ^__^ Ja'ne
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Reviewed By: Nobodynow On: June 20, 2005 05:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WEEE! Thank you so much for updating! I can't wait for the other two lemons, especially Yugi he's so cute. Also it's 'virgin' and besides forgetting the little ' sign it's better. Yeah! Hmm, so Bakura's the big bad nice to his slaves but has to have control guy? I'm rather fond of him like that. And so you brighten up my day, I have school and I'm sick and can't miss a day, I might just survive it after all. Also thank you so much for doing the lemon! Please hurry up with the next chapter the first two were withing days of each other. Forget that whole 'life' thing and spend you every waking and sleeping moment typing fanfiction! He he, a reader's dream. Nice lemon even if it was with a mildly short chapter. Love the story so far and for the rest of it hopefully too! Thank You. DK;) P.S. Notice I'm thanking you alot? It's 'cause we all love you guys!
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Title: NOOOO!
Reviewed By: cas [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2005 20:26 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! you HAVE to continue! what a cliffie...*criez* i was SO into it! plz i'm BEGGING you to hurry and do the next chapter! i will be a huge fan of yours if you just finish with bakura and malik! And they are like my fave pair too! how did you KNOW! lol. sry. Anyway, plz continue. CC
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Reviewed By: tozokuou (not logged) On: April 22, 2005 20:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story a lot! Great plot, great use of detail, and very entertaining to read. There are some spelling mistakes, but they aren't too bad. If you still don't have a beta I'll do it :) Feel free to IM me at 'g0t sw0gic x' or send an email to x_twilightstarz@hotmail.com to discuss the beta thing.
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Reviewed By: Letainajup@comcast.net On: April 20, 2005 18:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ah! Don't leave us hanging, that was a great start (especially if this was your first time)!!! Please finish Malik and Bakura, and please update ASAP! I would love to see Bakura and lemons with the other slaves (especially Ryou), GREAT JOB! Thanks for continuing to write!
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Reviewed By: Nobodynow On: April 18, 2005 17:09 CDT
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Woewho! Joy to the world you updated! That's not sarcasim. Please do the lemon! Thank You. DK;) For lemon refrences got to: Bittersweet Goodbyes Tales of Crimson Nights Anything by Dragondreamer Yami Dragon(Beware of Seto, Tristan, Joey centered pairings, work is exceptional though) Business Hours Regret Say more but I'm lazy and estatic, ya made my day!
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Reviewed By: Haibara3 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2005 11:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Amazing, I'm generally not into Slave fics as they usually result in violent death or rape. Which I don't think is right in a yaoi. Dark fics are Ok, but you need love too, right?^_^ Anyway enough of that, about your fic. This fic has the most interesting plotline I've seen on MM.org. The first chapter is a little dull, as it's an intro but I guess it's necessary. The second and third chapters are great though. Great style of writing, and no extrememely obvious gramatic errors. I think you should explain the servant creature better as, you'll probably use him later in this fic.
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Reviewed By: Nobodynow On: January 30, 2005 18:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Lemon! Lemon! Lemon! Update! Update! Update! That is such a new storyline, I can't stop saying it. It's usually Yami who just gets Yugi. Also like M/Y it's different and pretty good when it's not rape. Keep going this is great though you haven't updated in many many many months. Please? Thank You. DK;)
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Reviewed By: Nobodynow On: January 22, 2005 15:36 CST
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You haven't updated in like forever! You already know that though so pardon my stupidity. This is very interesting and well writen. One of the first slave fics that pulled away from the main stream. I can't wait for the lemon and/or lime in the next chapter. That is if you haven't died or been hit by a truck and/or bus. Sorry I'm rambling but this is such a great story and you should continue it to the fullest extent of your being. Very nice bits and I want to know what the story is behind them all, their thoughts and stuff and thank you for every second of it. Fun Fun Fun. Loved every minute of it and I can't wait for the update. Even though I have no choice unless I hunt you down. Darn my mom hid my flame thrower so I'll have to wait for you do remember you have a computer. Once again great story. Thank You. DK
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Reviewed By: Krusty (Letainajup) On: January 13, 2005 19:57 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this fic a lot! I like how Bakura is an all mighty lord and has Ryou, Yugi and Malik and his Whim! Too sexy, I hope to see more chapters! I'm surprise I never seen this story on Adultfanfiction.net! Please Update ASAP! Great job!
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Reviewed By: Eires On: November 21, 2004 00:47 CST
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This is a realy cool fic, update soon please
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Reviewed By: SweetasStrychnine(not signed in) On: November 19, 2004 10:57 CST
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Love it so far. My only suggestion is that you have someone beta your work before posting. Other than that, I hope there will be an update sooon.
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Reviewed By: Velvetina [MediaMiner Member] On: November 18, 2004 14:00 CST
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Enjoyable storyline, well written can't really ask for more...update!
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Reviewed By: lDragen [Not logged In] On: November 13, 2004 15:28 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh. My. God. This was so damn good! Nicely written, good plot, and awesome story!!! Please update ASAP.
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