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Reviewed By: Kai Hagara On: July 15, 2005 23:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GREAT LOVED IT
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Reviewed By: FreakyTikiBeachBabe [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2005 22:04 CST
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I liked this story a lot, but why was it rated for "hentai"? Unless I missed something here, there wasn't anything like this at all. I also noticed that suddenly Beast Boy hated Terra. Didn't he still like her before she was turned to stone? Other than these things, I really liked this story.
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Reviewed By: gothic_raven [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2005 01:15 CST
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you should write a sequal like 2 years later and have BB's reaction when he finds out about his child!
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Reviewed By: Kinsha [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2005 14:40 CST
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this is a really good story. Definately write a sequal.
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Title: years later
Reviewed By: porymon1 On: February 05, 2005 11:34 CST
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Raven comes back with a five year old trained in the asuathian way, i wunder how beast boy will act when he didn't even see his kid get born!
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Title: seriosly come on
Reviewed By: porymon1 On: January 31, 2005 14:06 CST
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you seriously need to write a sequel you know 2 years later kind of thing (hey maybey Tera is an evil bitch that wants reveng) but you should keep writing, ps: needs more detail
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Reviewed By: Jurodan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2005 21:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like the fact you threw in a LOT of characters, but why would Gizmo or Mammoth help? And for that matter, when they faced why didn't Brother Blood turn them? And wouldn't Raven want to wait until she had her child before going halfway across the universe? And Slade commiting suicide? Nuh-uh, not gonna happen. I like the interaction between Beast Boy and Raven (and certainly an interesting view of Terra Beast Boy interaction post betrayal). Some misused words, or misspellings, but not enough to affect the writing. There should be more actions, everything is dialogue and a new paragraph. I have dialogue, but not everywhere, especially not in combat. Take some time and describe things more. It seriously lacks an ending, even if you plan on a sequal, put one on there, because you really leave us hanging. Overall good story.
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Reviewed By: Lady Dark On: January 22, 2005 14:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
UPDATE SOON
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Reviewed By: LunaYami On: January 21, 2005 20:45 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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I really like this fic, please keep writing. You have nice style to your work.
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Reviewed By: porymon On: January 15, 2005 20:03 CST
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tera is being a bit of a bitch, no wunder she wakes up to find that her first(and still one she has feelings) love is with raven, o ya i can remeber how much those two girls got along well, loving it. ps i wrote this reveiw a few seconds after the last one just forgot to put this is in
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Reviewed By: porymon On: January 15, 2005 20:00 CST
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raven pregnet o my god, cool i wunder a green telepath that can change into any animal maybey or somthing else entirely, dum dum dum daaa! who knows. really great story can't wait for the rest. P.S.:alright beast boy, raven should have said that he looked SOOO, sexy in boxers though lol
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Title: wow
Reviewed By: porymon On: January 15, 2005 13:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is asome by the best i've read yet on this site. I gave you a nine for creativity because i fealt that you should have put more dialoge and discriptions. For example you should have a bigger scene for the hive members as they came in like "can't belive i'm back in barf central and i can't steal any thing"gizmo snorted. Mamothed looked down at the little gut in the green suit and did'nt really care a whole lot."hey weres the fridge any how? i can't remember since the last time a raided it" Jinx smacked both boys on the heads. "ouch!, cut it out jinx!" you behave know gizmo. Gizmo shuted up for fear of bad luck. That goes for you to Mamoth! "Fine.. hey a game.." with utter disgust for her comerades jinx grabs cyborgs arm. "one as smart as racks and the other is a snot nosed brat, well none's perfect, exept you Cyborgy" "heh he he..." at those words Cyborg blushed. and maybey when Beastboy sat on the bed with Raven and took of his shirt she could thought (haw geez ther is his but right in front of me, I just want to squeez it and he taking of his shirt, o my god!)"alright with you?" Raven just nodde and turned around. (thank god he's not taking of his pants!.. although.. eek what am i thinking!) "g'night raven" Beast boy yawned and whent to sleep. as raven doesed of she thought to herself only 15 more minutes.. mmm..) just an idea if you could this kinda stuff into account thats all and antisapate your next chapters.
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Reviewed By: anynomous On: January 12, 2005 08:00 CST
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I saw your summery and had to comment. I used to read the original Teen Titan comics and wondered if you knew how wrong it is for Beast Boy to have parents. Beast Boy (or Changeling as he's sometimes called) is an orphen. His parents were scientists studying disease is relation to animals in africa (I think). Garfield Logan (his real name) only survived because his parents zapped him with a raygun machine which was part of their research. He recovered but also turned green (he was blond, blue eyes, 5 yrs old.) They didn't discover his powers until he changed into a mongoose to kill a snake which threatened his mother. His parents died when their boat went over a cliff. Beast Boy would have died too but changed into a bird and flew away. He said 'I could have saved them, but I was just a stupid little kid.' He was adopted by a superhero couple (who shortly after died) leaving him rich, living in a mansion with a butler as a guardian (I know it sounds like Batman.) I'm very disappointed how far off from the comics the cartoon veered. PS... Terra was a pychotic traitor who died accidently while trying to kill the Titans for Slade (she was sleeping with him...I'm not kidding.) and crushed herself under her own rocks in her fury to destroy them. Why she hated them? Not explained...they thought she was nuts. They covered it up but declaring her a hero who died in action. Beast Boy was heartbroken. Slade was captured when Terra died by surrendering to a new Titan...his son.
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Reviewed By: Echoside [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2004 21:48 CST
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Your doing a great job with this. I'll be waiting for the next update.
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Title: WOOP
Reviewed By: Echoside [MediaMiner Member] On: December 14, 2004 20:33 CST
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Keep thous updates coming. WOOP, very nice chapter.
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