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| "Next Door Neighbor" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] | Reviewed By: me!!! On: January 17, 2005 23:17 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really liked your stroy please update soon k bye byes!!!!
| Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2004 20:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow this is a good school fic already keep up the good work AND UPDATE AGAIN FOR YOU HAVE SPARKED MY INTREST AND I WASNT TO SEE WHAT YOU HAVE IN THE FUTURE!
| Reviewed By: elie3173 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 23, 2004 17:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, YaYa! I got another review, too(does a happy dance), I really like it that you included fluffy and rin together in the story and that inuyasha isn't that ooc anymore- at least as much as you can with a fanfict
| Title: part 2 of my review (sins it was to big for 1 review)
Reviewed By: Diamonds_are_Forever On: November 23, 2004 02:01 CST
Comment/Review:
of a fuck-up life if everybody wants to rape/kipnap her while there are more fish in the sea. No they all want kagome and blablabla and that would just ruien a perfectly fine ficcie. So please keep yours a bit difrent, try making the chappies longer and try not to make them hit off so soon. I really not mean to flame you or something, just wanna try helping a bit, i'm not saying my ficcies are that great or something. But i'm really just trying to help by all means! well i hope you update soon i'll put ya in my fav list ^^ bubai K!$$ and Love ~ D.A.F. (diamonds are forever)
| Title: Just a note!
Reviewed By: Diamonds_Are_Forever On: November 23, 2004 02:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi, I really like this fic, but I wanted to say a few things (I don't mean to flame you by all means, just trying to help). Their are so many highschool fic's of Inu Yasha that it's hard making a new story about it sins it's almost all the same, and you should try giving your a twist! Don't start everything so soon, with Sesshoumaru and Rin going ut first night and also liking eachother at first view. It all goes a bit to fast. 'Cause that's in every fic the same, make them go of at a bad start or make Rin a very shy person or such. Try stretching things a bit with stuff, and the chapters also get longer by it and that's only a plus point! And kagome and Inu Yasha, well I think the part where they bumb into eachother is cute. But you also make then go very fast towards eachother at first meeting. if people come togheter so fast, you have nothing to write about later, and then it will become on of those stretched stories that doesn't seem to end or has a plot and where kouga pops in as a over sex bastard who always fights with inu yasha and when kagome and inu are togheter he tries to force her and then inu drops by, inu becomes the hero of the day, kagome bawls all they long her "horriefied" experiance and inu yasha tells her he loves and that he wants to marry her. He shows kagome a ring, she starts crying and after graduation they wanna get married, but then kagome got kidnapt ... and blablabla and the story goes on and on giving me the idea that kagoem must have one hell o | Title: hi YaYa!, u baka
Reviewed By: elie3173 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2004 20:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
sorry it took so long 2 review YaYa!, but I have sooooo much 2 do it-so it doesn't justify getting mad at me. i think it was great and i agree w/ tetsusaigatenseiga about yadh being too ooc.
| Reviewed By: tetsusaigatenseiga [MediaMiner Member] On: November 21, 2004 20:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
good chapter, Inuyasha seemed a bit ooc, but not a lot. This is a good story, keep with it
| Reviewed By: tetsusaigatenseiga [MediaMiner Member] On: November 21, 2004 18:59 CST
Comment/Review:
I think this is a good fic, the bump into something hard and soft thing seemed cute, I think I'm the first guy who said cute, anyway great fic, just one spelling error,which was still understandable, people don't review cause they lazy bastard
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