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Title: chapter...mumblemumble
Reviewed By: Reyn [MediaMiner Member] On: September 10, 2005 01:30 EDT
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wah! I love this story!! It's my favorite!! I could never get bored of it! I love the way you're building things up. I mean, yeah, it's slow as hell, but that only adds to the tension with the promise of an explosive ending. If you sped things up, the story would start to feel rushed. As for chapter titles, I suppose any are fine as long as they come from Gravitation. All that aside, did you even have a beta for this chapter? (glares suspiciously at numerous mistakes) Well, it was another awesome chapter! With that said, it's late, and I'm tired, and my sister is reading everything I type over my shoulder, which is EXTREMELY annoying. (glares at sister)
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Reviewed By: DKB On: August 31, 2005 22:51 EDT
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Update! This sis a really awesome story and I love it to death!
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Title: chapter 19
Reviewed By: Reyn [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2005 22:36 EDT
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Hooray! You posted! You posted! Now I can finally give you my whole hearted review! Problem is, I don't remember half of what I wanted to say...LoL. I feel sorry for Tatsuha, but at the same time I feel sorry for Fugisaki as well. I want Fugisaki to have someone, but at the same time I want Tatsuha to get Ryuichi, but then if that happens, we run out of ppl to give to Fugisaki, unless you plan on bringing in Rage (good lord, I hope not. I hated her.) or someone like that. Wah! I'm torn! I can't decide! Damn you for dragging my attention away from Shuichi and Yuki, the supposedly main couple of this fic! (glares)
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Reviewed By: Hellfire_of_yaoi [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2005 16:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this fic. You made me even go and get an account here on MM, just so I could get to review this fic. Well I am trying to write my self but my english sucks... What I really like this fiction for is the originallity of the story, when you use the real elements of the manga and make them kind of yours. The story have many sidelines and intrigues and your biggest problem is to bind them together (just like Maki Murakami). But I kind of miss better descriptions of the surroundings and I would like to follow the main characters private thoughts a little more detailed. I really hope that you will continue writing and finish this story, dont be afraid to put in more angst in this fic. Not everything have to end happy forever after... Muhahahaha!
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Reviewed By: Animecatt On: July 20, 2005 22:01 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love the story, I love Shu and Yuki so I can't wait to see what you have in store for them. Keep up the good work and I'll watch for your updates.
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Title: chapter 18
Reviewed By: Reyn [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2005 20:37 EDT
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WooHoo! Another update!! I can never get enough of this story. If I had the time, I would totally go back and read it all over again each time you updated. But as my time is now, I can't. wah! So! So! When are you gonna update next? Oo! Update on my brithday!! It's Aug. 5! Can you do that? That would be the most awesome Gravi birthday gift ever!!
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Reviewed By: paraluamn On: July 19, 2005 04:24 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I WILL HUNT YOU DOWN WHEREVER YOU MAY BE IF YOU DON'T MAKE THIS BETTER. haha.. just kidding. you still need to finish this excellent story.
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Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2005 10:25 EDT
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Wow, as aggressive as Tohma is, he sure can be different when he's alone with Hiro. I think that was very smart, letting Hiro be the aggressor, however briefly that may be. As usual, your lemons are sultry and so erotic. Yum, yum! Hm... Yuki didn't recognize Shuichi's voice? What a jerk! God for Shu, then, to give Yuki a good tongue-lashing. Too bad it wasn't a good tongue-lashing... Hopefully that'll come later? ;)
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Reviewed By: paraluman On: July 15, 2005 20:43 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmmm.. I went to the movies today to watch Charlie and the chocolate factory with my amazing friends. I was really excited about seeing it. WHY THE HELL WOULD I TELL YOU ABOUT ME AND CHARLIE AND THE CHOCOLATE FACTORY YOU ASK?!?. I just wasted 7 bucks since I couldn't get my mind of your story. I was preoccupied the whole time. I didn't laugh. Didn't listen. Didn't pay attention. Didn't care about the movie. Your story was all I could think of. My brain wandering somewhere. Into your story. And to be honest. I guess the movie that I thought would be interesting turned out to be... not as interesting as I thought. Please update soon. I need a life. 0_o yuki and shuichi. more of them. hehe
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Title: CH17
Reviewed By: SilverLight On: July 13, 2005 07:15 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't think this chapter is too long. I love this story, is different, but no too different fromm the real thing. Keep up the good work.
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Title: Infallible
Reviewed By: SplendidGenesis [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2005 20:09 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You're killing me, please please write much much more! I need it, god I need it. This is turning out to be an awsome fic! I will have to murder you however if Yuki and Shuichi don't end up together(i won't seriously hurt you, that bad) but yes keep writing and give me more yuki. HOT HOT HOT Yuki
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Title: WHAT!?!?!?
Reviewed By: Nishi Imaidegawa On: July 07, 2005 18:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
With updates about once a month, who would ever ask you for short chapters? Tell me, give me a name, give me an address, I'll take care of them. You should have made htis one as long as you damn well pleased. Since I'll probably have a whole month to read it and reread it. Not that I am complaining to o much some things are worth the wait, this definatly being one of them. Anyway pay no attention to those crazy fools, who told you they like shorter chapters. They are lying, they are obviously anti-fanfiction fans in disguise. And write more, write longer, and PLEASE update soon. The always ranting, Nishi
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Title: Absolutely great!
Reviewed By: redhaze03 On: July 06, 2005 19:47 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've read all this in one go! I started and it sucked me right in! The sotry is well thought out and captivating. I'm dying to find out what happens next! Oh please say you'll continue it soon! *begs* Oooh... I wonder what Eiri-san thougth about that phone call. *rolls around in the drama* Keep up the great work! ~
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Title: chapter 17
Reviewed By: Reyn [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2005 23:58 EDT
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What?!? Who the hell wants shorter chapters?!?! I'll beat their ass!! One of the reasons I love your story is because the long chapters totally make the wait more than worthwhile! Gah! Well, another great chapter as usual. One thing confused me tho. Considering their age difference, I though Yuki would be shorter than Tohma around the time Nittle Grasper first started, but in the story, you mentioned Yuki lowering his head when kissing Tohma. Maybe I jest have the dates wrong in my head...oh well. I can't wait for the next chapter tho!!
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Title: What next?
Reviewed By: oneechan On: July 05, 2005 06:18 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
That's great. I love the pairing Tohma/Hiro and Yuki/Shuichi. But I want know when could I read the sequel? And what happened next? Did Yuki and Shuichi could be together again? Did Mikka discovered it? ...
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