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| "Wisdom of the Pharaoh" Reviews/Comments [ 20 ] | | Pages (2): [ 1 2 › » ] | Title: Hi! I like your story!
Reviewed By: Gallantmon On: October 12, 2007 07:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi, I'm Gallantmon of the Hazard! I'm the same guy that reviewed your 'Wiser Generation' the spin off of this story and I have to say that I can't take my eyes off of this story. Yugi showing 'another side', minus Yami Yugi, of himself and getting in-between the legs of Mai Valentine, Tea Gardner, Ishizu Ishtar, Vivian Wong, and even Joey's sister is pretty 'interesting', if you know what I mean! *hint hint* Turning them into his slaves, building a harem, and putting Yugi in a whole new 'light' so to speak is very 'enticing' and I can't wait for more! Personally, I also like your 'Wiser Generation' story as well. Well, anyway, the reason that I asked for your Hotmail e-mail is that I wanted to ask you this question: 1) Can I use elements of your 'Wisdom of the Pharaoh' and 'Wiser Generation' stories like the 'Eyes of Horus' 'and Touch of Hathor' mind-control techniques as well as other stuff from those stories as long as I give you credit for them as I should? Anyway, take your time in answering and I hope that you update this, your 'Wiser Generation', and your 'White Seduction' story, which is the story that got me 'interested' in your stories in the first place. Later and best wishes! PS: If you want to find me, you can use the Search Engine, set to search for authors, and type in either 'Gallantmon' or 'Gallantmon of the Hazard'. Also, try story searches for 'Destiny Stars', 'Darkness Moon', and 'Twilight Wars' and they all are 'X' rated stories if you need to know. Hope to hear from you! Bye!
| Reviewed By: RyuYushi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2007 14:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Where exactly did you think of a Female Pharaoh?
| Reviewed By: Lum_the_Mad On: December 10, 2006 03:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Near perfect fic, for a lemon any ways. The story and concept is top notch, not to mention very hot. I sort feel the lemon scenes could use some work, they don't seem to be all that detailed or graphic. Also the "costume" idea that was pretty much introduced in the first chapter has yet to really come into play. I expected more of the girls to dress up as cards by now. Despite the lack of detailed lemon scenes.. story is still steaming hot just but plot/situations alone. As for where to take the plot, I feel any the story arcs that make the monsters more real would be nice, could allow dark magican girl to come into the picture. Would greatly advance that plot line you have of unlocking Yami's memories. In the end I feel if you could expand the lemon bits to include more foreplay like breast, legs kissing, etc this story could rival that eva Fic Homebodies as hottest lemon ever imo.
| Reviewed By: Rey Rey On: June 21, 2006 12:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story u have i enjoy reading Yu-gi-oh stories and hope u continue ur great work and maybe a couple more girls u can add to make it a big harem like Rebecca Hawkins, maybe have some duel monster girls as part of his harem like Dark Magician Girl, Mystical Elf, etc. but long story short keep up the great work.
| Title: Ultra Warrior
Reviewed By: Daniel Rodriguez [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2006 22:21 CDT
Comment/Review:
*Leacherous grin on* This is too perfect!! Yugi now has a full-fleged harem! Way to go, boy! I pity the fool that tried to break them up, because the girls will just deliver "Rightous Womanly Fury" upon the soul. Keep it up!
| Title: Ultra Warrior
Reviewed By: Daniel Rodriguez [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2006 21:18 CDT
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^_^ I praise the lemony work that you do, buddy-boy! This fanfic kicks ass, all the way!! I want to see more!! Keep them coming in, especially Mai, Vivian, Tea, and Ishizu too! More women for Yugi to play with! Hope that when he gets home, maybe a little dominatrix play! Yugi being the dominate one (plus a woman of his choice) while he "prepares" his women for bed. I would love to see any of the women dressed up in sexy, leaving-little-to-the-imagnation, latex wears. Keep it up!
| Title: Ultra Warrior
Reviewed By: DJ On: April 13, 2006 16:54 CDT
Comment/Review:
THIS IS GETTING GOOD!!! PLEASE, CONTINUE THIS STORY FOR I LOVE IT ALL THE WAY!!! KEEP IT UP!!
| Reviewed By: lemon fan On: March 25, 2006 18:18 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a great story ive been readin this story from the begining it is really great keep these chapts. coming and i cant wait til the next update happens i'll keep my eye out for it
| Title: Ultra Warrior
Reviewed By: Daniel Rodriguez [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2006 19:53 CST
Comment/Review:
Ah, another excellent chapter written. I'm loving this story more and more! I want to see more breast-play action and maybe a little spanking. Please, continue this awesome fanfic! Keep it up!
| Title: Ultra Warrior
Reviewed By: Daniel Rodriguez [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2006 19:29 CST
Comment/Review:
This chapter was kick ass, a true Valentine's Day present in my eyes. I want to see more soon, especially if it involves Yugi and big breasts. Keep it up!
| Title: Ultra Warrior
Reviewed By: Daniel Rodriguez [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2006 19:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
^_^ This was all good. I hope to see more action between Yugi and Ishizu, most especially breast action! What can I say? I like to see big-breasted women play. ^_^ Keep it up!
| Title: Ultra Warrior
Reviewed By: Daniel Rodriguez [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2005 12:24 CST
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^_^ This was all good! I would like to see more soon. Thanks for the update, my friend! Keep it up!
| Title: Ultra Warrior
Reviewed By: Daniel Rodriguez [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2005 20:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
^_^ I like on where this is going. The more, the merrier! I hope Yugi gains a harem of busty, lusty sexy women. Mai turned the tables, but only a little. Yugi still has the advantage here, as far as I can see. Please, update soon! I want to see more! I would also like to see a little catfight or so between Yugi's girls and another who maybe a potential harem girl... Vivian Wong!! Plus, if its not too much trouble, I like to see a little spanking or so. You know, seeing Yugi or Mai spank Tea. Keep it up!
| Reviewed By: AC On: August 03, 2005 15:38 CDT
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ah, an update, cool. Hot dancing there, and hm, Mai is gonna try and be Yami's queen, huh? Is she gonna become the villain?
| Reviewed By: AC On: June 23, 2005 11:05 CDT
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cool. it's nice to see a hetro Yugioh lemon story out there. I'd like to see Tea get some. she's my fav anime girl. long legs and nice rack, not to mention a pretty face. As for a conflict, maybe Kaiba can find the book and use it for his won purposes?
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