Reviewed By: PROTOTYPE Uber Rei Model 00 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2004 18:24 CST
Comment/Review:
Everything was fine until... 1) In your summary, please don't talk "like ur sum kind of teenbopper". 2) An OC. Need I say more? I know this is FANfiction, but it KILLS me to see authors like you disrespect canon by making OCs. Bakua SEEMED to be in character. Overall, I think you're a great writer--you just gotta fix up your writing a little bit. Don't be discouraged! I'll be on the look-out for more of your stories!
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