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Reviewed By: Garret On: April 23, 2008 08:36 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A good (and long) story, i reade it from chapter 1 to 43 in a day. Just check the spelling a bit, as for the characters in the story they are all ok with ONE big exeption, Soutas father.... Jeez first time i realy hate a character in a story, can you please let him be hit by a truck or something? Keep it upp.
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Reviewed By: l.t.m. On: December 08, 2007 22:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
can you up date asap and finesh the store so we can see wate hapen to the coper ok inuyasha and kagome also to moroko and sango well shippo meet his older salfe
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Reviewed By: ladydorek On: November 04, 2007 16:21 CST
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im sure it is a good story but i have just started the first chapter and the charactors are super ooc and it is very annoying also your spelling is horrid i know you warned the readers but if you know then check your work!!
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Title: Just spell checking and adding more terms....
Reviewed By: Tora_chan259 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 15, 2007 23:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm only on the chapter about the salamander demon but I have to tell you!!! Houshi; not hosai Naraku- not.... whatever.... And other terms because alot of people mess them up.... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ hanyou, miko, Kagome, Inuyasha, Sango, Miroku, Kirara (pronounced Kilala but theres no "L's" in japanese so it's Kirara...) ~~~~~ Shippou, Souta, Jii-chan, okaa-san is mother, Ottou-san is father, ~~~~~ Koibito is 'beloved', Koishii is 'beloved' or 'my love'.... OH! and Kagome's friends in her time are Eri, Yuka, and Ayumi. Then theres Kouga, Ginta, Hakaku, Ayame, Jenenji, Shiori (the bat hanyou) ~~~~~~~~ Kagura, Kanna... I don't remember the baby or any other incarnations... ~~~~~~~~ Haori (are the shirts that Inuyasha wears (both inner and outer)), Hakama (pants), Osuwari means sit. ~~~~~~~~~~ And thats all I can think of for now... Sorry, you probably already know a lot of these but 1. some of your spelling is wrong, 2. just more fun words.... 3. if you need any others just ask me.... (via email...) ~~~~~~~ OH! I was kinda wondering... If Miroku carries the onigiri with him, how does he keep them from getting stale? and how the hell does he carry them? there REALLY sticky... and I think they'd go bad pretty quick.... Dried meat (like jerky) is more probable.... it was made in all parts of the world at the time and it can be carried and stored easily..... I do throughly enjoy your story and in NO WAY do I want to convey to you anything less.... I simply had to tell you these things and hope you will consider editing your errors... *bad spelling bugs me a little when I'm reading...* mostly I can ignore it though.... I'M NOT CRAZY I SWEAR!!!! lol~~~~~~~~~ However, have you considered finding a beta? Thanks for your time!!! ~Tora
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Reviewed By: Redi Hebi On: August 12, 2007 13:36 CDT
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great story but you misspelled Naraku there is no o its an a ok but other wise very nicley done
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Reviewed By: hime kagome28 On: June 11, 2007 20:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really like the fact that it is really funny !!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: hime kagome 28 On: June 10, 2007 14:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it really was pretty good !!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: kikyo hater 28 On: June 10, 2007 14:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
congrats on the 12 pages !!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: The Fanatic On: May 31, 2007 07:02 CDT
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I have just discovered your story and think that it is great. But I have seen something that I try to correct whenever possible. In chapter 8 you say that a Geisha is a Japanese prostitute, that is wrong, they never were prostitutes. They are professional entertainers and hostesses. They myth that they are prostitutes was invented and propagated westerners like me who didn't know any better.
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Title: Wootness!
Reviewed By: Dissona On: April 14, 2007 00:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story! Its very unique even though it has the common plot of "OMG Kagomes a hanyou!!" You put so many interesting details and your characters don't do stuff that they wouldn't do in the manga like alot of fanfics do. So yah... Keep up the great work!
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Title: Talk about irony...
Reviewed By: Hieis_soulmateis_Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2006 18:38 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!!! When I read the last chapter, I thought that it would be cool if Kurama was actually Shippo, but I didn't think that you would ACTUALLY go there!! That so totally rocks!! Did Shippo's hair turn white after the adoption between him and Inuyasha was complete? And why did he change his name? And where did Hiei go?! Arg, so sorry about all the questions, but your story is that good!! And what the heck is going on with Kagome?!?!?!!? Plz update soon!!!!
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Title: I luv it!!
Reviewed By: anime fanlover [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2006 09:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it! please update soon... but I still don't get who's Yusuke -_-"
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Title: Angel~of~Fire
Reviewed By: DragonChic [MediaMiner Member] On: March 05, 2006 20:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this story is great i love it please update really soon
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Reviewed By: Odoriko-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2005 20:33 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am so loving this story! ^_^ I sat in front of my computer for like 5 hours reading it until i finished up to your last update! Please update when you get a chance and I hope the writer's block doesn't bug you for too long...That sucks...Good Luck on Finals ^_^
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Reviewed By: WoodShop2300 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2005 22:31 CDT
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Chapter 24 is missing some test.. it jut ends mid sentence
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