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| "Blackout" Reviews/Comments [ 18 ] | | Pages (2): [ « ‹ 1 2 ] | Title: Damn good read!
Reviewed By: swahshaw [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2007 05:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I know this fic is old but damn it is still my favorite lemon for this anime! Love your writing style!
| Reviewed By: Scyggy [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2006 00:47 CDT
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This has just about everything to love about a one shot hentai... it was funny, sexy, teasing, and had a nice mini-plot to make it interesting. I salute you, good sir.
| Reviewed By: The Master [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2006 09:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story it was great. Keep up the great work. I hope you do a sequel. Like Shinji and Asuka get married and have a kid. Your protrayal of Asuka was 100% accurate. Shinji was already growing a back bone in the series.
| Title: ...Whoa.
Reviewed By: Kanto The Slayer On: August 22, 2005 03:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, here's the deal... Your writing style is impressive. I daresay this is some serious, hard-hitting stuff that takes the original NGE and turns it up a notch. Love the bad-ass Shinji. ^_^ Aye, the spelling mistakes were there, but you don't get too many marks off for that as long as it's understandable in general and has a good plotline. As for Originality, you definitely have a one-of-a-kind story on your hands. Forgive me for quoting a line from Sin City, but... "That's a good way to get yourself noticed." Okay, story review. The tale of Shinji and Asuka battling the heat (lol), each other (typical, but you write it well), and their own selves (which you wrote EXTREMELY WELL) is a compelling read. Definitely a realistic situation in the fact that this kind of thing would drive the ordinary person insane- or at least half that. Heck, it almost did that to Asuka, never mind her mutinous thoughts about her fellow pilot. You stuck to the characters quite well, and I say thank you. So many nOObs out there these days... you are excluded from the list. There is talk of a sequel (or at least another chapter), I hope? Please do it. The world needs more writers like you.
| Reviewed By: forechunkukee [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2005 23:05 CDT
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Woah...must be nice to live in a dream world where everything is perfect...to bad it isn't. Hopefully Belle can see the reality of the situation she's in, and not just the "reality" she imposes on herself. Thats where Kichiro steps in right? He sure is rather...blunt with his reasoning though. Strikes quite a contrast with the man-whore he used to be =P. Awesome work, keep it up! d('')b
| Reviewed By: forechunkukee [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2005 21:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Before the review, here are my opinions/comments - Great job! I rarely see fics as well-written as this one (BTW, i also read the livejournal tidbit). I find it very odd that the better the fic written, the fewer reviews it seems to have (for the most part anyway)...very curious. Anyway, the pacing and character development here are excellent. You've done an awesome job working out most of the bugs. While the characters do seem a bit OOC (a minor complaint, your reasoning for it is understandable. It actually helps the story.), I found it did not detract from your story overall. Now to the review! ~ Your style of writing is great, very solid. You build great mental images with your words, keep it up. Your spelling and grammar were a little off. Just the occasional hiccup, but some were noticeable. Nothing major in my opinion though. I love the story here. You make the scenario a believeable one, if something akin to this ever happened. If I would let my personal preferences play a part here, i would give this section a 9, but only because I'm not the greatest Ikari/Sohryu fan (I happen to like Ikari/Ayanami better, but you wrote this so well, I forgot my preferences). I honestly enjoyed this fic very much, it is very entertaining/amusing, and mixes in innuendos and humor in just the right amounts. Overall, this fic kicks ass. I hope you write a sequel, I know you won't disappoint! Keep up the great work!
| Title: Awesome
Reviewed By: Ramiel On: April 09, 2005 21:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome, awesome, awesome. Not only did you keep the characters more or less in character (and gave a valid reason for them being slightly OOC), but you also put them in believable situations. Also, you snuck in Misato at the end, which just rocks. Speaking of which, I think you DEFINETLY need to continue this, and I think you have 2 paths to take. You can either leave Misato out of the entire thing and focus more on Asuka and Shinji some more, or you can smack in an Asuka/Shinji/Misato type thing, which you set up anyway at the end. Or you can have Shinji kill Asuka and Misato and go rape Rei or something, but that'd just suck. Theres my two cents.
| Title: More
Reviewed By: Unknown Flamer On: March 17, 2005 00:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Screw the review. I want the sequal...NOW
| Reviewed By: vash357 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2005 00:07 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good, can't wait for the next part. Spelling and grammar could use a little work, but excellent otherwise.
| Reviewed By: MiyazawaFan On: February 11, 2005 12:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good. Definitely one of the better lemons I've seen. One thing, which I know is a little nitpicky, the past tense of drag is not drug. [Drug (v.): administer a drug to.] The past tense of drag is dragged. There are certain errors that annoy me, and that's one of them. Sorry.
| Title: great
Reviewed By: blood [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2005 17:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i loved it and will wit fore a seqel
| Title: Great
Reviewed By: M2D On: February 01, 2005 10:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was F'in Awesome.
| Title: Get more self confidence.
Reviewed By: j0 On: January 30, 2005 15:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
No, you don't suck. It wasn't bad at all. Write a sequel. I look foward to reading it.
| Reviewed By: Fusion Blaster On: January 26, 2005 00:05 CST
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Dude All I want is the implied fucking sequel.
| Title: Needs some work
Reviewed By: Unknown Flamer On: January 25, 2005 01:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
You really need to work on your spelling and punctuation. At least a good spell checker can help. Other than that, it was an enjoyable fic
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