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| "Heero's Slave" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] | Reviewed By: Yanagi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2005 19:16 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Senior? and you have time to write something so good? Yay, You. More please.
| Reviewed By: camillian On: January 25, 2005 00:14 CST
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well, this is an interesting slave type of story actually set in the gw universe instead of some au. update again soon! i can't wait!
| Reviewed By: orange green On: January 24, 2005 22:51 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
There are so many problems with this fic. You need to make paragraph breaks when a different character speaks. That would make it less confusing. When refering to the doctor, you need to actually type out "doctor," not "Dr." I could go on, but there's a character limit to these reviews, and if I actually emailed you the entire critique, it would be longer than your chapter. Grammar is your friend. I won't even touch the plot. Not with a barge pole.
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