| "One Night Stand" Reviews/Comments [ 26 ] |
Reviewed By: Inu-chan13 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2009 12:15 CST
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And this is your ATTEMPT at a lemon?!?!?! There's no way! You must be a natural at this because my first attempts at lemons were horrible and amature! (I'm MUCH better though ^_~ ) Anyway, my only piece of advice would be minimize the technical "this is what he/she/they is/are doing" stuff by about 2%. Allow the reader to envision it in their minds, see it for themselves. Again, this was VERY WELL WRITTEN!!! I give it a 9/10! ^____^
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Reviewed By: Ditany [MediaMiner Member] On: November 29, 2009 08:44 CST
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That was very good for a first time. Keep up the good work.
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Title: Mija
Reviewed By: Mija aka Maryann [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2007 02:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omg that was sooooooo hot I mean DAMN! whew *fans self* Ive missed those two so much and reading a lemon about them just wants me to go read more, lol, but I was wondering, had you had this posted somehwere else before or had it up then took it down and reuploaded it?? for somereason it rings some sort of bell in my head...either way I totally loved it and thank you for recommending it, now I am off to read the other fics you spoke of thank again Fyrloche for getting in toucch with me, has missed you much, much huggles and smiles Mija...:-)
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Title: AW XD
Reviewed By: lakoda [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2007 22:10 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aw, So cute I really enjoyed this! The lemon rocked!
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Reviewed By: Boom On: March 24, 2007 05:10 CDT
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Hey great story. I think that when you did the lemon scene it was fantastic because you know how everyone says Inuyasha is a softy inside well if he really was a softy wouldn't he go slow on the first time? Yeah well I think you captured that perfectly
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Title: Nice job
Reviewed By: Charmander [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2007 18:28 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really like your story. orginial take. I look forward to more
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Reviewed By: kagome313 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2007 05:09 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome lemon!!! i wasnt expecting the ending tho :p Great job here^^ Plwease check out my first fic!! *puppy eyes* Pwease!! lol =D
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Reviewed By: animelover4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2006 12:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was a very unspected turn to the story... and i liked it a lot! it was pretty awesome considering it was your first lemon... mines actually suck XD like i said before awesome job!!! =)
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Reviewed By: Karley On: June 27, 2006 15:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow... that was awesome..first one shot lemon ive ever read like that and it was great i def wasnt expecting the ending. :)
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Reviewed By: Inu-Shinta [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2006 11:29 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was very good for a first time. You should think about adding a lemon here and there to stories as you see fit. If you don't want to write more lemons thne that is your decision to make.
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Title: ehhhh?
Reviewed By: Razer On: April 24, 2006 18:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
so the whole thing was an act?
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Title: YOU!
Reviewed By: Princess Bulma [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2005 11:06 CDT
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Nice trying to confuse very one!!!! I have to admit that i was fooked and i like the way that you took it. It is not everyday that you find a story like this i really liked it. and i hope that you write more like this. you have a flair for writeing lemons. I think that you could write more like this. I have to admit that i almost fell out of my chair, when i was done. That has to be one of the best i have read that are like this i mean i have read many like this in different genras(sp?). And this is the best by far. That is the trust one out there on how they love eachothere and there is nothing that can stop that love. And i would have to agree with Kagome if i had InuYasha in front of me i would pick him over any body in a heart beat. I would love it if you could do a story about how that had met and maybe kill Kiyko if you could because i hate her with a passion. I want her to die that would be the sweetest. I hope that there will be more like this coming from you in time that would. Sorry that this is so long but i just love your story and i just had to tell you. Please think about writing more like this. That would be so cool i hope that you do. Was the basball player Koga? That is who i thought it was. Please email me and tell me if i am right. I would really like it if you could. Thanks again for writeing a story like this. We need more out there with imangitve one like this, but there are not enough. Thanks again. Love the story and the way that you had ended it. :^)
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Title: Great Job!!!
Reviewed By: Darkangel2379 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2005 00:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it!!!
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Reviewed By: silverflower On: May 13, 2005 23:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey fyrloche this is verry good. the way to tell a good lemon is if you start to heat up yourself and boy... did i heat up! i love your story reunion and you need to update. P.S keep writing lemons, i suck at them and your really good at them. but i guess that because youve had EXPERIENCE if you know what i mean.(I'm a virgin)
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Title: One Night Stand
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2005 16:16 CDT
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I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Reviewed By: Simply a Lady (so lazy she doesn't wanna sign in) On: April 19, 2005 21:37 CDT
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Pounces on your back, and giggles merrily. I liked it. I did. You set the mood up nicely, the only thing I would have changed is some of the biological connotations in the lemon itself. And I believe you know what I mean. I would go into more detail but you know what I mean! I am sure you know more terms than that...after all you are still the head honcho for one of my favorite stories. Speaking of which... When (poke) are (poke) you going (poke) to (Poke) UPDATE (big poke) Inquiring minds really...REALLY want to know!
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Title: One Night Stand
Reviewed By: serenathegoddess On: April 05, 2005 20:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed that. Especially the end. I wan't expecting that. But it was very refreshing.
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Reviewed By: scherezade [MediaMiner Member] On: February 19, 2005 21:09 CST
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Hey there! What a different approach to the Inu-Kag lemon! No hot spring, no club! I thought you did a wonderful job setting the scene...came off very mellow and sensual. And I loved the ending! Role playing to spice up life... LadyCat Bailey and I had been joking about doing a series of role playing fics for Inu-Kag...maybe ONE day... :)
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Title: wow
Reviewed By: Mija *nsi* On: February 19, 2005 02:42 CST
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ooh wow that was hot, and soooo loved the end, I was hoping there was more to it than just a one night stand, hell I couldnt have had just one night with Inu..yummy...and they have kids??? awwwwwww that was a perfect touch, great job on the one shot lemon, I found it very hot, thank you for sharing that with us...huggles and smiles a fan Mija...:-)
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Reviewed By: mojop [MediaMiner Member] On: February 18, 2005 14:40 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great writing style! impressive! very good story!
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Title: huh?!
Reviewed By: Sesshy-lover On: February 17, 2005 16:08 CST
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I'm confused!*.*
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Reviewed By: Dark Angel Of Love(not loged in) On: February 17, 2005 16:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! I totally loved it! this is going on my favs list! I hope you write more like this, I'd read em!
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Reviewed By: PrncessS [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2005 14:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was hilarious!!! You totally had me, I was thinking "wow, that's awfully forward and seems out of the characters you made them into, but I guess it's supposed to be PWP" Anyway, that was really well written, good job. The the little plot there was (but there's not supposed to be alot, it's a one-shot! =) ) was good too.
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Reviewed By: :-P On: February 17, 2005 14:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh i love these type of stories...SOOO CUTE!
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Title: lmao
Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2005 13:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i was not expecting that as an ending good job and keep up your good work and was a good oneshot! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Nick F. On: February 17, 2005 09:41 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! Congratulation on your first lemon but please don't let it be your last. You write such wonderful lemon! The role playing twist is such a good one! Why don't you do another one, like prom dates in a limo or something.
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