| "The Secret of the Fae" Reviews/Comments [ 20 ] |
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Reviewed By: Duece of Spades On: November 06, 2001 18:24 CST
Comment/Review:
Quite good. It lives up to the previous chapters as well, although there wasn't as much closure as I would have liked (but that's just personal preference.) Kudos. |
Reviewed By: Umi-chan (the author) On: November 07, 2001 16:56 CST
Comment/Review:
Thanks fo the comments D and Deuce. I'll keep your comment in mind, Deuze, about having more closure at the end of chapters. Sometimes I like ending it on a cliffhanger though.
Chapter 6 in the works! I'll have it up soon. |
Reviewed By: nice-day On: November 10, 2001 03:57 CST
Comment/Review:
well structured, and layed out. The tension laiden silences at
the table were very good. Though I don't know much about the characters
themselves, I can imagine that happening between any family where members
have just been called away to war. A sort of numbness, with no one wanting
to say what they're thinking as they themselves just don't want to hear it. The only small improvement I would suggest is a little more
description in your writing. On the whole, excellent. |
Reviewed By: Duece of Spades On: November 14, 2001 17:59 CST
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Yay! Really good, and it's an improvement! (not that there was much to improve, mind you.) Please keep it up. |
Reviewed By: Duecy On: November 21, 2001 19:00 CST
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First off, I wish you luck with your website. I'm too busy to even think of trying to start one with all my projects, so I give all who have sites and update them props. You are better people than I.
Other than it being so short (A quasi-chapter, if you will) it's good. I couldn't get into it as much as your others, but that was only because it dropped off as soon as it did get good. Again, good luck. |
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